[問題] 寫作無法突破....

看板IELTS (IELTS雅思)作者 (Eritrea)時間14年前 (2011/08/27 00:30), 編輯推噓7(7013)
留言20則, 6人參與, 最新討論串1/6 (看更多)
雖然去補了某家知名的雅思補習班 但英文作文還是一直無法突破 (我認真寫和隨便寫的分數居然都差不多 老師上課常常用"google it" "I'm not sure" 帶過問題.....) 我英文程度應該還算OK TOEIC沒怎麼準備去考也有800分 但是每次作文都被批改的只有5.5分左右 我現在漸漸的越來越喪失信心 想試著換個補習班改改看作文 不知道有沒有推薦的地方 或是有好心的版友可以幫我看看問題到底出在哪.... ================================================== 題目:People think that building should be knocked down and give way to the new buildings. Do you agree or disagree? How important are old buildings to us? With the rapid economic development, great deals of regions are confronted with a renewal program, and are building modern structures to replace older ones. Some people might consider it is too rude to these historical structures, and others regard it as an opportunity of social development. This essay will elaborate the merits and drawback of the debate. Some individuals claim that aged structures should be protected for the following reasons. First, constructions are symbols of life experience of the local area. A large number of historical buildings should be preserved but not destroyed. In contemporary world, due to globalization, the regional features are replaced with the prevalent western culture gradually. The aged buildings play vital roles in establishing variation among architectures. In contrast, people might hold different opinion that the conservation of aged structures is expensive and that is difficult to find the master of traditional repairing skills. As far as I am concerned, the maintance of traditional constructions might produce severe stress on governments’ budget. Moreover, partly historical structures are located in the commercial regions and traffic lines. If the authorities only take traditional conservation into account, without regard to practical efficiency; manpower and resources will be wasted. Based on all factors offered above, whether a aging construction should be removed to build a new one is a question that may be answered on a case-by-case basis. People involved should carefully weigh up the pros and cons of the issue before reaching a conclusion. ========================================================================= 以上~感謝~ -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 220.136.5.221

08/27 01:24, , 1F
first, secondly,...To sum up... 這些文章內好像沒看到
08/27 01:24, 1F

08/27 01:25, , 2F
雖然很基本 但是批改的考官會看這些 你可以看看批改標準
08/27 01:25, 2F

08/27 01:25, , 3F
應該google得到 XD
08/27 01:25, 3F

08/27 01:38, , 4F
我不清楚ielts評分標準, 不過光就這篇來說 依照我淺見
08/27 01:38, 4F

08/27 01:38, , 5F
這篇文法錯誤當真是不少 拼字也有錯誤比方maintance..
08/27 01:38, 5F

08/27 01:40, , 6F
最重要的一點是 從頭到尾 我還是不知道你到底agree or
08/27 01:40, 6F

08/27 01:41, , 7F
disagree, 我只是看到你列出優缺點罷了 XD
08/27 01:41, 7F

08/27 01:42, , 8F
題外話 toeic 800分應該不含寫作 雅思寫作是另一回事
08/27 01:42, 8F

08/27 01:45, , 9F
倒數第二段If...竟然接"分號 ;" 這不是一個完整句..
08/27 01:45, 9F

08/27 01:46, , 10F
第2段你說following reasons, 但我只看到一個
08/27 01:46, 10F

08/27 01:47, , 11F
文章的結構比較鬆散 論理邏輯方面也不是很有說服力
08/27 01:47, 11F

08/27 01:49, , 12F
簡言之, 這篇作文並沒有切實回應題目 第一段成敗已分
08/27 01:49, 12F

08/27 01:58, , 13F
嗯嗯 TOEIC不含寫作~所以我想我大概被踩到死穴了...
08/27 01:58, 13F

08/27 01:59, , 14F
我看寫作書 好像並沒有非得寫出支持哪個論點 可以同時支
08/27 01:59, 14F

08/27 01:59, , 15F
持兩點?(因為這樣可以寫比較多) 我有參考雅思七分論文
08/27 01:59, 15F

08/27 02:00, , 16F
也有用這種寫法...所以不知道是不是真的不能這樣用?
08/27 02:00, 16F

08/27 02:01, , 17F
然後分號那個...是補習班老師幫我改的 大囧 所以是錯的...
08/27 02:01, 17F

08/27 03:57, , 18F
同意或不同意->舉例->相反意見->推翻->結論 ...
08/27 03:57, 18F

08/27 12:51, , 19F
雙方論點都要呈現,但要有支持的一邊
08/27 12:51, 19F

06/08 10:53, , 20F
看完不知道你要支持哪一邊?
06/08 10:53, 20F
文章代碼(AID): #1ELyePnc (IELTS)
文章代碼(AID): #1ELyePnc (IELTS)