可以幫我看application letter嗎?

看板Oversea_Job (海外工作)作者 (@-@)時間17年前 (2008/04/15 07:54), 編輯推噓1(102)
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先跟大家說聲謝謝 這是要應徵航運的公司的application letter 內容、分段、用字遣詞有不好,英文太爛 都請不吝指教,我會很感謝您的 (BTW, CV,Resume,application letter,英/美兩國的寫法有所不同嗎?) 虛線以下開始為正文 --------------------------------------------------------------------------- Jason S.H. Chien zzzzz Rd.,Shulin City, Tapei County,Taiwan April 15, 2008 Mr. Huang, The Human Resource Manager, xxxxx Co., Ltd xxxxx Rd., xxxx District, Taipei City 104 Dear Mr.Huang, I am interested in the account management position advertised in your website. I recently discharged from military service, and am actively seeking employment. My courses in International trade, financial management and business management have given me a solid base upon which I plan to build my career. You specify that you are looking for someone with good English, strong EQ, team worker, interested in working oversea skills/characteristics. During my school life, except for school, I also have several years of experience in a variety of fields including translation and sales. I have roughly two years of part-time job experience in an English-Chinese translative letters for a charity---Taiwan Fund for Children and Families. Because I need to hand in the letters every two week. Accordingly, it made me learn how to strike a balance between academic affairs and jobs, how to arrange the time. In working process, I can help the poor children. Besides, this work also broadens my global vision. As working in pet store, I also found a new job, which is a salesperson in a small pet store near my college. Besides taking care of dogs and cats, I needed to serve coming customers simultaneously, to introduce our products to them politely, to deal with frequent horsing around customers. As to extracurricular activities, I joined swimming team in school. By swimming, I can keep myself healthy and optimistic. We often participated in various games. In order to win the game, we had a good communication. We discussed the relay race strategy, someone adapted to be the first swimmer, someone adapted to be the last one. The members encouraged each other during the game. Undergoing several games, every member of swimming team knows the real meaning of teamwork. I have been to University of California,LA to take 6-week English courses. I used this rare chance to figure American culture out. In the final semester of my university, I exchanged to xxx University, Hong Kong. It was my first time to go to Hong Kong. I made many friends from Hong Kong, China,Germany,Canada,etc. Therefore, I think I like to go abroad, to do an international job. Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you to arrange an interview. Sincerely, Jason Chien Jason S.H. Chien -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 202.75.66.16

04/15 12:49, , 1F
這個cover letter字數有點多,最好少於一張letter size
04/15 12:49, 1F

04/15 12:52, , 2F
好像太多細枝末節了,最好針對雇主的job description
04/15 12:52, 2F

04/15 16:14, , 3F
cut down abit, also check grammar
04/15 16:14, 3F
文章代碼(AID): #180-wd0s (Oversea_Job)
文章代碼(AID): #180-wd0s (Oversea_Job)