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看板TOEFL_iBT (TOEFL_iBT托福)作者endeavorattf (endeavor)時間15年前 (2011/03/22 20:40)推噓3(3推 0噓 0→)

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小弟我對於獨立寫作部分要想出三個正面或反面的點子實在有困難所以爬了前人的文修改了自己的模板變成 1.TOPIC 2.A點1 3.A點2 4.B點反面 5.結論這樣子的形態但是我不知道我套這樣子到底好不好順不順由於作文都沒有人幫我看過都是自己打完用findscore改所以找不到自己的盲點想請各位板大幫我看一下其中一篇我的作文 For successful development of a country, should a government focus its budget more on very young children education rather than on universities? Opinions and views always differ greatly when it talks about the topic whether the nation should spend the money on the young kid education or on universities. On the one hand, a portion of people assert that children should be taught as early as possible to let them learn more. On the other hand, another people think that the college should be the main point to spend the budget. In the final judgment, I agree with the latter opinion. In the following, I would like to provide some reasons to support my point of view. To begin with, there is a reason for me to consider my opinion. The reason is that the mental and intellect of young kids cannot let them to afford the deep and broad knowledge. According to a biological experiment, the brain must be full mature after age eighteen. For example, my brother learned a lot of chemical knowledge from school when he was an elementary school student but he totally forgets the chemical conceptions now. The reason he told me was that he could not even understand the principle of the chemical when he was a little kid, so he just memorized the conceptions but could not use them. In addition, the second reason is not far to seek: the young children could not know their favorite area, so they often just learn the area which the parents ask. My classmate's experience can function as a very good example. When he was eight, his mother enforced him to study literacy. He was too young to make the decision that time and the enforcement lead him to reject learning. However, when he entered the college, he found he was very interested in astronomy. Afterward, he starts to research astronomy and really does well in this area. Of course, it may be true that if children start to do some specific studying early, they will have more time to develop themselves. For instance, a lot of parents sent the kids to cram schools because they do not want their kids to lose on the start point. Yet, after carefully comparing the front and the back of this aspect, we will discover the disadvantages of this side of point are qualitatively greater than the advantages. To sum up, given the reasons and the examples discussed above, which intertwine to form the organic and persuasive viewpoint, I can safely arrive at the conclusion that country should not focus money on little kids education rather than on universities. 謝謝大家造成麻煩請見諒~ -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 111.250.11.33

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