[分享] SK2 Rosa-寫作滿分的關鍵祕密Part 2：發展例子

看板TOEFL_iBT (TOEFL_iBT托福)作者SKTWORosa (SK2Toefl Rosa)時間8年前 (2017/12/30 16:48)推噓4(4推 0噓 1→)

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大家好，我是SK2的Rosa，今天要來跟同學聊聊托福寫作。同學常覺得寫作是四科裡面最好進步、準備起來CP值最高的一科，但是仍然有許多同學打了四五百字，卻拿20初頭的分數。其實在作文裡面，除了主題句之外，例子也很重要，有好的主題句之後，讀者是看你例子的說服力決定是否要相信你。那到底要如何寫出好的例子呢？以下給同學三點建議，讓你的作文拿下28分。一、相關-只談一件事在寫例子時，最重要的一件事是要專注只談一件事，譬如：你的主題句理由是能夠省錢，在寫任何一句話時，你都要想著“省錢”的這件事。不要又很隨性地提起”喔對了，除了省錢，也會非常省時間喔！” 例如： I am poor, and studying in Europe can save me a lot of money. For example, when I enrolled in INSEAD 1-year MBA program in France, I only have to give a tip which is around 10% of the total bill. Also, I just have to study for around 1 year, amounting to only 1 million NT dollars. Yet, if I had studied in Harvard University in Boston, then I might have had to tip the waitress generously every time I dine out. As a result, I might have spent at least 3000 NT dollars for a meal. Apparently, studying in Europe not only saves me money but also time. 把最後一句話改成 I am poor, and studying in Europe can save me a lot of money. For example, when I enrolled in INSEAD 1-year MBA program in France, I only have to give a tip which is around 10% of the total bill. Also, I just have to study for around 1 year, amounting to only 1 million NT dollars. Yet, if I had studied in Harvard University in Boston, then I might have had to tip the waitress generously every time I dine out. As a result, I might have spent at least 3000 NT dollars for a meal. Apparently, studying in Europe saves me millions of NT dollars. 二、具體-寫熟悉的事物例子除了必須要每句話都跟主題句相關之外，也要具體。所謂的具體是指要有足夠多的細節。建議同學能夠寫日常生活中你熟悉的事物，譬如：談到” 省錢”，你可以舉你的朋友去歐洲唸書念了兩年才花了兩三百萬，但是到了紐約唸書的朋友，兩年總共花了近一千萬。當你寫的是你很瞭解的事情時，自然地就會有許多的細節，也會夠具體。此外，建議同學遇到“時間”或是“金錢”時，能夠加入數字。同學常常在一個段落裡面，會出現很多次“save money”, “save a lot”, “cost too much”,”not affordable”，但是如此一來，讀者常常會納悶，“到底是省了多少錢叫做省很多呢？”，假如能夠改成“only costs 8 dollars ”, “costs at least 100 dollars”，是不是更有說服力了呢？在例子裡面加入細節或是實際數字的時候，不用擔心評分官會去查證這件事，然後如果你寫的與事實不符，就給你比較不好的分數。托福寫作主要看的是你的說服力，意即你有能力提出具體證據來應證你的論點。因此，證據真偽不重要，重要的是夠具體。三、直接-專注在改變許多同學在寫例子時，都會很習慣鋪陳，寫了許多現況或是還沒改變之前的事情，但是在英文的邏輯裡面，讀者會預期例子要盡量直接。這是因為對方沒有太多時間閱讀你的作文，所以建議同學盡量寫改變的過程以及改變的結果，現狀不用交代太多，舉個例子： I am poor, and studying in Europe can save me a lot of money. For example, I have always been poor and I often have to eat instant noodles for months on end. Yet, when I enrolled in INSEAD 1-year MBA program in France, I only have to give a tip which is around 10% of the total bill. Also, I just have to study for around 1 year, amounting to only 2 million NT dollars. Yet, if I had studied in Harvard University in Boston, then I might have had to tip the waitress generously every time I dine out. As a result, I might have spent at least 3000 NT dollars for a meal. Apparently, studying in Europe saves me millions of NT dollars. 同學可以直接拿掉白色的部分，變成 I am poor, and studying in Europe can save me a lot of money. For example, when I enrolled in INSEAD 1-year MBA program in France, I only have to give a tip which is around 10% of the total bill. Also, I just have to study for around 1 year, amounting to only 2 million NT dollars. Yet, if I had studied in Harvard University in Boston, then I might have had to tip the waitress generously every time I dine out. As a result, I might have spent at least 3000 NT dollars for a meal. Apparently, studying in Europe saves me millions of NT dollars. 最後做個總結，關於托福的獨立寫作，請同學記得這三個原則：相關、具體、直接祝同學能夠越寫思緒越清楚，也能夠更喜歡用英文思考、寫作文！新年快樂！;D Cheers, SK2 Rosa ^___^ -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc), 來自: 83.208.223.107 ※ 文章網址: https://www.ptt.cc/bbs/TOEFL_iBT/M.1514623729.A.E8F.html