[題目] 書信寫作遇上障礙 附文請指教
書名：不知出處 老師提供
頁數：不知出處 老師提供
題目：寫一篇抱怨信,主因是隔壁鄰居常半夜仍將將音樂開很大聲,屢勸不聽
以此信通知悉改,或將以報警處理
疑問：因為我近半年來都是接受雅思的學術寫作訓練,臨時決定要考多益,
所以對書信寫作沒有下任何工夫,今天是第一次練習寫抱怨信件,
下文是我寫的原文(若需要老師改過的文章,我會再po上來)
依照老師的說法是,這封信非常的不好,因為太拐彎抹角了,
無法直接達到抱怨信的要求,而且句子構造不符合書信的要求,
不可以用學術寫作的方式下筆…但我已經很盡量去寫那種我想像中的書信寫法了
我實在不明白他是甚麼意思,可以請板友幫我看看嘛?麻煩了!
Dear Mr.XXXX:
I am writing to tell you that I have discussed with you about the behavior
that you have been doing since last week, which I have been kept waking up
by the loud music that you played every night. Although, I have tried to inform
you how this matter affecting our life and our sleep, and I also have requested
you politely to consider turning the music down or using headphones, you
seemed to decide not to reduce this annoying situation.
According to the law, it is necessary to inform you that playing music
loudly is an illegal action which is in breach of the Noise Control Act. I would
appreciate if you are preparing to show some concerns on this matter. I am
afraid if you play your music at midnight at this loud level constantly, I will
have to report the breach to the police without any other choices.
I personally believe that you are a decent neighbor who understands how
to access to a better solution while these uncomfortable matter happening.
Therefore, I am looking forward to having your kindly reply. Hopefully, you
could figure out the best method to deal with situation cordially. And it can
be assured that I will take no further action whether you show your sincere
intention as soon as possible.
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因為開始寫作前這位老師說不可以寫的太aggressive而且要正式一點
搞半天她這是在.....冏rz
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句子短一點喔...我想這真的是我的壞習慣 從雅思寫作TASK2傳染過來的
(因為TASK 2要寫250字UP 寫長一點就會有保證字數:P)
我也覺得我整篇I來I去很討厭 但真的不知道書信要怎麼用被動?
像雅思寫作通常都在寫你我以外的事情 用起第三人或被動就很自然
書信真的讓我超掙扎的啦= = 等下網路正常一點我來PO老師修改版
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