[請益] 新鮮人英文自傳求批!
嗨 大家好!! 想要請大家幫忙看一下英文自傳~主要是放在人力銀行的履歷中!
看有沒有文法上的錯誤或者哪裡需要改進的~為了閱讀順暢有些有化名XD
My name is Cheng-Wu Jin and everyone calls me Jin. I received my bachelor
degree in Applied Foreign Language from PTT University.In college period,
I decided to serve as a Dormitory Self-Government Officer. It was a great
experience and overcame my fear of speaking in front of a big crowd. Because
I needed to help students understand dorm rules and held activities for the
dorms.
During my student years, I’ve had a few part-time jobs. For example,
I served as a waiting staff at local hotels. Working at the hotels gave me an
opportunity to practice my communication skills, especially with foreign
tourists. I also worked as a salesman at specialty shop. The way to deal with
customers and selling products are important things I have learned. For
example, keeping a smile and being passionate about the products and services
are two tips to treat your customers.
I sincerely hope that you will give me an opportunity to work in your
company. Thank you for your time and consideration.
謝謝大家的幫忙!
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恩我一開始也是想寫說我知道的waiter~看到有人說waiting staff，以為要說這個比較好
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阿好像用your不恰當 是不是要treat the customers
這句是想表達"對待顧客的時候有以上2個Tips可以使用"
還是說要改成cope with customers 比較好嗎
因為有一直想來想去不知道要用什麼字眼比較好，怕用deal with 前面用過了~
主要是要呼應前面說的工作，我有學到這2個tips來面對買東西的客人~
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Thank you. 這個是要改最後一段的嗎?後面的your time...都不用這樣嗎?
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真的很謝謝M大耐心地看完~受益良多! 我馬上來改~真的很謝謝!!!!
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好!!!我用cope with好了! 真的再次謝謝mrsianas大!!!!
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恩謝謝a大的指點!~我文法真的蠻爛的，目前都有持續加強複習中!
身為應外畢業實在是有點丟臉QQ
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