可以幫我看看這兩句哪一句好嗎?
麻煩各位了
第一句
My family in which there are six members,
including my parents,two brothers, and one sister,
is well-fixed due to my father’s dedication to his work.
My father is running his own business, producing scarves, hats,
and gloves and exporting those items to United States,
United Kingdom, and Mexico.
第二句
My family is composed with six members, including my parents, two brothers,
and one sister and well-fixed with my father’s dedication to his own business
, which produce scarves, hats, and gloves and export them to offshore market,
such as United States, United Kingdom, and Mexico.
順便請位各位有哪些可以修改的點呢?
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