[問題]可以寫得更精簡嗎?

看板ST-English (英文科技寫作)作者 (阿茂)時間16年前 (2009/02/02 20:21), 編輯推噓1(102)
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抱歉請教各位 以下是我寫的信件內容的其中一部分(包含三段) 但是想把內容改得更精簡(把3段的內容濃縮成兩段甚至一段) 請問可以怎麼修改呢? ---- I know your contact info and company via the website. Curremtly, we are seeking business partner in your country. I would like to take the chance to establish relationship with you. You will never regret to contact us, because we are one of the best RF connector, Cable Assembly and Antenna manufactures in Taiwan with the cutting- edge technology and superior R&D team. It's with great pleasure we invite your interest toward our products.Our customers are spreaded in Europe, Asia, South America and Middle East.We would like to take this opportunity to introduce our company and products, with the hope that we can cooperate with each other in the future. ---- 感謝^^" -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 218.175.231.94

02/03 03:46, , 1F
怪怪的.. 不如先介紹自己公司,再讚美對方是理想的合作對
02/03 03:46, 1F

02/03 03:47, , 2F
像。再陳述合作的好處...我可能會這樣寫吧
02/03 03:47, 2F

02/03 08:02, , 3F
了解 感謝 khwang0大大
02/03 08:02, 3F
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