[請益] 如此寫作是否太過表面?

看板TOEFL_iBT (TOEFL_iBT托福)作者cvsi04236 (ＢＢ小Ｂ)時間13年前 (2012/07/30 17:16)推噓0(0推 0噓 0→)

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我爬過板上精華區，獨立寫作所用的模板大概是: 第一段: 開頭，說明主題正反論述皆有人支持，我支持正/反(以正為例) 第二段:先說明反也有人支持，舉例或說明理由第三段:但是以我來說，我還是支持正，以我自己為例第四段:結論，雖然反有人支持，但是根據我自己與以上論述，我支持正面但是我使用此模板發現因為正反都需要論述，所以導致可能例子不夠深刻，也想不出好句子或是有說服力的例子，所以想請大家看看我的問題是不是這樣我寫了一篇獨立寫作請大家幫忙看看主題:it is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. You agree or digree with it? 本文: The topic , it is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. Some people think this words is correct, while some people consider that doing exercise is better to relax. I also have myself view of this issue. In my opinion, I support the former , that is, watching or reading something is better to get relaxed. On one hand, some people like to be relaxed by doing some exercise. Take my best friend, Mike as an example.When he gets tired of his homework or anger with something, to calm down , he always does some exercise ,such as jogging or playing basketball. He says that after doing that, it will make him relaxed and relieve his stress. There is no doubt that doing physical exercise is a good way to make someone relax. On the other hand, for me, it is definitely better to relax by watching or reading something. Firstly, I dislike to do exercise because of the sweat. After an intense exercise, we must get wet. It is difficult for me to feel relaxed due to the bad feeling. Furthermore, I like to read books and watch movies.By doing the both, not only do I feel relaxed , but also I can learn something from movies or books.It will make my emotion down, peaceful and great. There are two habits of mine fostered thanks to the relaxing influence of reaing books and watching movies.Firstly, due to the good effect of reading, before I fall asleep , I always read a novel or newspaper to get myself more relaxed, which is helpful for me to fall asleep.In addition, at that time I feel so tired , it is my habit to watch comic movies. It takes my bad feeling out and make me smile from ear to ear.The above are my favorite things. In my view , I support this words more. Although there is still relaxing effect from doing physical exercise,I still like to watch movies or read books more. To sum up, from the above reasons and mentions, I agree with this words more,that is , it is better to relax by watching a movies or reading a book than doing physical exercise. 文長約350~400，寫得不是很好，請大家給點意見!感謝萬分!!! -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 140.116.1.134