[請益] Integrated Writing Task這樣寫可以嗎？

看板TOEFL_iBT (TOEFL_iBT托福)作者excimo (excimo)時間10年前 (2015/06/21 21:28)推噓4(4推 0噓 16→)

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各位好，最近準備TOEFL，比較頭痛的是speaking和writing的部分今天做了TPO 25的Integrated Writing Task，探討古代陶罐是否被當成電池使用我打了以下的文章，結構如下 1. 說明兩方論點不同 2. 文章第一段的論點，和講者的反駁點 3. 文章第二段的論點，和講者的反駁點 4. 文章第三段的論點，和講者的反駁點 5. 摘要講者的三個重點，並摘要講者的結論但是我發現網路上找到的範文架構都不是這樣特別是1. 連OG 5分範文也沒有提出文章的論點，重點著重在寫出講者的論點 2. 不見得有最後一段摘要我想請問我應該著重在於把講者的論點多打一點，還是文章和講者的論點都要平衡報導？因為我總覺得只打講者的論點似乎不是完整的文章，不知道TOEFL要求的是哪一種？謝謝大家附上我打的文章： The passage said that clay jars containing copper cylinders surrounding by iron rods were not likely to be used as electric batteries. However, the lecturer argues against the passage and provided standpoints that the clay jars could have been use as batteries. To begin with, the passage pointed out that the clay jars could not be used as batteries because there were no evidences of conductors. And since batteries would likely to be connected with conductors, the absence of conductors argued against the theory that the clay jar was used as batteries. However, the lecture pointed out that these clay jars were discovered by villagers, which are lay person and not professional archaeologist. Therefore, the conductors could have been missed or overlooked as uninteresting objects. Secondly, the passage said that the cylinder was similar to cylinders found in the ruins of Seleucia. In Seleucia, the copper cylinders were used for holding sacred text scrolls. Since the cylinders share similar appearance, the recently discovered cylinders were also likely to be used to hold text scrolls rather than used to generate electricity. On the other hand, the lecturer argued that although the cylinders discovered in these two places are similar, it cannot be used to prove anything. It was also be possible that the cylinder was used initially to hold text scrolls as used in Seleucia, but later adapted to a new role of generating electricity. Finally, the passage concluded that there was no known usage of electricity at ancient time. Therefore, a battery would be useless to ancient people. The lecturer stated that there were many possible usages of electricity even in the ancient time. She said that electricity could deliver mild shock or tingling sensation, which can be inferred to signs of magical powers or invisible powers. The electricity could also be used for healing process and to relieve pains and aches, much like the ways we do in modern time. Therefore, there were possible usages of electricity in the ancient world. In conclusion, the lecturer said that the conductors could be missed during archaeological discovery process, and that the similarity of cylinders did not mean that the cylinders could only be used to hold text scrolls. She finished her argument that there were possible usages of electricity in the ancient world. Based on the above reasons, the lecturer said that it was possible that the clay jar was used as battery in ancient times. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc), 來自: 122.116.70.76 ※ 文章網址: https://www.ptt.cc/bbs/TOEFL_iBT/M.1434893296.A.67D.html

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