[文法] 給美國人看的自我介紹/簡歷

看板Eng-Class (英文板)作者時間12年前 (2014/01/26 22:58), 編輯推噓0(0012)
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給美國人看的自我介紹/簡歷 Claire Piano teacher in 3 schools for elementary school students. Kindhearted, humorous and loyal. Easy-going and nice to people. Enjoying traveling. Taking responsibility. Finish tasks in time. Rarely hassling someone else, Always helping anyone in need of help. With much interest, looking forward to the pleasure of working with you. 不知道這樣夠不夠精簡,文法上有無需改進之處 感謝指教! -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 114.27.111.153

01/26 23:19, , 1F
確實精簡 但放太多重點在你的人格特質上了 學歷呢@@
01/26 23:19, 1F

01/27 15:04, , 2F
teaching piano in three elementary schools
01/27 15:04, 2F

01/27 15:05, , 3F
loyal 我不確定你想說什麼,也許可以改成 trustworthy
01/27 15:05, 3F

01/27 15:06, , 4F
"taking responsibility" 改成 responsible
01/27 15:06, 4F

01/27 15:06, , 5F
或 dependable?
01/27 15:06, 5F

01/27 15:10, , 6F
第六行 in time 和 on time 都可以,但意思不一樣
01/27 15:10, 6F

01/27 15:11, , 7F
perhaps "taking assignments seriously"?
01/27 15:11, 7F

01/27 15:13, , 8F
第七行一樣我不知道你要說什麼,「我很少求人幫忙?」
01/27 15:13, 8F

01/27 15:14, , 9F
通常建議用正面的字,不要用負面的字再加以否定,
01/27 15:14, 9F

01/27 15:14, , 10F
倒數第二行,連續兩個 help 有點累贅
01/27 15:14, 10F

01/27 15:16, , 11F
perhaps "helpful and dependable"?
01/27 15:16, 11F

01/27 15:17, , 12F
最後一行,"with much interest" 有點多餘
01/27 15:17, 12F
文章代碼(AID): #1IvIAL5R (Eng-Class)
文章代碼(AID): #1IvIAL5R (Eng-Class)