Re: [請益] 麻煩各位幫我看下cover letter

看板Oversea_Job (海外工作)作者 (朧月夜)時間13年前 (2013/03/24 22:14), 編輯推噓9(9011)
留言20則, 7人參與, 最新討論串2/2 (看更多)
好了.. 經過各位板友的指點+參考了一些網站的sample 我砍掉重練了一個新的版本 改掉improve my English..一些詞語 還有一些怪異的文法 麻煩大家再幫我看下了..如果有什麼更好的寫法,也請再告訴我了 感謝各位m(_ _)m MY NAME 1F., No.15, Xxx Rd., Xxx Dist., Taipei City, Taiwan 886-0000-000-000 March 22, 2013 Ms. Lily Lee Personnel Manager XXX Corporation Dear Ms. Lee, I was very excited to see your vacancy for a web developer position which was advertised on the job123 website. Having several years experience in the industry. I love building website, and I hope it is popular with everyone. This is a perfect career which bring me enthusiasm and satisfaction. I am finding a web development and overseas job which can broaden my horizons and utilising my experience, knowledge and skills to benefit a company. My related experience as follows. * Knowledge of PHP OOP Programming, MVC Framework and MySQL. * Coding using front-end technologies, such as HTML, CSS, JavaScript, jQuery. * Familiar with NetBeans, Enterprise Architect, UML, SVN, XAMPP etc. * Welcome new challenges and learning new skills. I invite you to review my works of site (http://xxx.xxx.com) . It will show you that I am a capable and professional individual. As you can see from my enclosed resume both of Chinese and English for your reference. Thank you for your time and consideration, I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, MY NAME -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 1.164.35.99

03/25 01:04, , 1F
主要都是英文跟文法的問題,CV的表達上很ok了..
03/25 01:04, 1F

03/25 01:04, , 2F
找個人幫你改英文就好了:)
03/25 01:04, 2F

03/25 03:15, , 3F
恩 我覺得差不多了 開始準備其他部分吧~ 加油
03/25 03:15, 3F

03/25 17:02, , 4F
good like your attitude
03/25 17:02, 4F

03/26 17:12, , 5F
那我就放心了 謝謝大家^^!
03/26 17:12, 5F

03/28 13:31, , 6F
用英文寫一篇cover letter的確挑戰,不知道你的讀者語文
03/28 13:31, 6F

03/28 13:33, , 7F
能力與背景如何?我感覺你已充分流露出對這個領域熱忱,
03/28 13:33, 7F

03/28 13:35, , 8F
但是Perfect,enthusiasm,satisfaction 這幾個字還無法幫助
03/28 13:35, 8F

03/28 13:37, , 9F
我了解你為什有熱忱,到底是web develop中的那些過程或結果
03/28 13:37, 9F

03/28 13:39, , 10F
帶給你什麼感受ex.成就感,自我挑戰,解決問題,從中學到新知
03/28 13:39, 10F

03/28 13:42, , 11F
等,(我隨便舉例),是我會把這些寫出,be more specific,
03/28 13:42, 11F

03/28 13:43, , 12F
讓人知道你跟這個領域獨特個人化的連結
03/28 13:43, 12F

03/28 13:48, , 13F
加油,若有冒犯,還希望你見諒^^|
03/28 13:48, 13F

03/28 14:11, , 14F
可以寫dear hiring manager, 收到履歷的人會很開心
03/28 14:11, 14F

03/28 14:48, , 15F
OK好的~謝謝S大的指點哦!用這些來形容可能有點太抽象了
03/28 14:48, 15F

03/28 14:48, , 16F
那我再多增加一點具體的描述好了~thank u^^!
03/28 14:48, 16F

03/29 03:07, , 17F
文法有許多錯誤,看起來不是很順暢,可以找英文系的幫忙改
03/29 03:07, 17F

03/29 03:08, , 18F
一下,比方說finding job > 用looking for a position就好一
03/29 03:08, 18F

03/29 03:09, , 19F
一點
03/29 03:09, 19F

03/30 00:07, , 20F
好的 謝謝\\(難怪履歷雖然被人資開了但都還沒找我面試 凹
03/30 00:07, 20F
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