Re: [寫作班] ID NUMBER-kfsfat 第一禮拜題目-電腦

看板ST-English (英文科技寫作)作者dvlin (Dee)時間17年前 (2007/11/27 22:54)推噓1(1推 0噓 2→)

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※ 引述《kfsfat (kfsfat)》之銘言： : 這是我的文章..麻煩大家了 : Recalling the first time used computers in elementary school at age of 11, : it becomes an essential implement in my daily life till right now. 有幾個地方要注意上下句的主詞、時態一致性 "used... becomes" 過去式->現在式可以改用完成式 Since + I used... (過去發生的事) + it has become... "till right now"已經包含在 since的意思裡面了可以精簡掉 "computers... it" 複數->單數建議用"the" computer 用一個電腦代替所有的電腦 "Recalling... it" 上句沒有主詞，是一個dependent clause (subordinate clause) 用來形容下句的主詞。但是在進行"recall"這個動作的人是你，不是 it (computer) 整句可以改成 "Since the first time I used the computer in elementary school at the age of 11, it has become an essential implement in my daily life." : Computers, doubtless, plays an important role as people pursue more and more : knowledge as well as the development of the modern technology. ^^^不加定冠詞另外，"plays a role in..." 也是一個常用的句法例句: "Computers play an important role in our pursuit of knowledge and the development of modern technology." : Through the computer, connecting to the Internet, it is not easy : to image how wonderful this virtual world is. imagine : Entering the website of Wikipedia, google, and so on, you can search whatever ^^^^^^ 這邊要用search for search (location) for (object) search Google for information : you desperately want to figure out. For engineers, it also useful for their ^is : tedious researches which need complicated calculations even more simulations. ^and : By the efficiency of the computer which helps people to deal with the : questions, it fulfils our technologic aspiration (desire, wish). : PS(上面空格我不知道要用哪個單字比較好，麻煩指教) 這樣寫法有點亂寫科英盡量使用簡單有條理的句子就好比較不容易出錯，也比較好讀 "The efficiency of computers helps us (to) deal with our questions, and fultils our desire for technology." : Finally, the development of the computer is faster and faster. It does not : only let us gain the information and the knowledge, but also brings us to the ^^^ ^^^兩個都不加定冠詞 : future world. It is nothing to say that computer surely occupies an important ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^不太懂這裡意思 : position in our daily lifes. "occupies... position" 感覺好像太literal 像是說有一個實體的地點最後這句其實就說 "Surely, the computer has an important place in our everyday lives." 這樣簡單就可以了。 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 99.231.10.180 ※ 編輯: dvlin 來自: 99.231.10.180 (11/27 23:04)