Re: [寫作班] 版友 kfsfat .托福第一周 第一題
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※ 引述《kfsfat (kfsfat)》之銘言：
: 太久沒寫了，真是太慚愧了。po上這篇文章給大家討論討論。
: 感謝囉。
: Nowadays, university has no longer been a fresh word since students took
take
: university (degree) as their basic (fundamental) diploma. According to my
^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^
A degree and a diploma are two different things!
建議這一句重新改寫.
也許你想表達的是 "Students take undergraduate studies as their foundation
of knowledge." 或其他?
: personal experience, I strongly believe people should attend collage.
college
: Becaus college is a place that students can learn more new knowledge and
where
: social experience.
: ps:1.上面第一個括號是想問說省略比較好還是寫出來比較好?
: 2.第二個括號是想問說用basic 還是用fundamental比較好?
: First, university is definitely a best learning environment as well as a
the
: place which is full of professional courses one prefers. There are a variety
: of subjects you can choice such as mechanical engineering, chemical
choose
: engineering and so on. There are also many professors with abundant teaching
,
: experience which can help students to solve the problems in their studies.
who xxx
: With teachers' help, students can learn lots of useful basic and professional
^the
: skills which are very helpful to their future career.
: Second, university is also a spot for everyone to interact with people of
: different backgrounds. For example, some of students perhaps determine to
xx ^^^^^^^^^
how about "would like"?
: attend school clubs. Here, you can get in touch with many friends, and also
: learn how to accomplish an activity with suggestions and help of others.
: During this period of time, it is a good chance for students to realize how
learn?
: to cooperate with one another.
: All in all, students not only can be well-educated here, but also can learn
^can xxx ^^建議用become xxx
這樣會好讀一點
: how important the social experience is. Last but not least, everyone has his
: or her own purpose of attending university; however, here is absolutely a
the
: perfect place for students to fulfill their will.
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