Re: [寫作班] 托福第14週 hsnudrum, 1

看板ST-English (英文科技寫作)作者chileno (老頭子)時間16年前 (2008/06/24 21:58)推噓2(2推 0噓 5→)

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: As cities improving, they would all probably face with the issue of 1.improve的用法不對，這裡不能只有現在分詞。可以改成：As cities improve或With improvements of cities。 2.face的用法：不能說they would face with the issue... 應該是they would face the issue... 或 they would be faced with the issue... : whether they should destroy the old or historic buildings or not. As a : college student, I think that a city should not destroy these buildings. 不太明白為什麼要提as a college student。你後面的立論跟這個身份似乎也沒有關係，大可不提。 : In the following discussion, I would reason and provide evidence to : support my viewpoint. : Historic buildings can bring a lot of economic benefits to the city, 1.較為簡潔的寫法：can be economically beneficial 不過你的寫法也對，僅供參考。 2.thus不是連接詞，不能這樣直接連接兩個句子，最好在thus前面加and。 : thus these buildings should not be destroyed. Taking my country for example, taking的主詞跟後面子句的主詞Tainan不同，不能用這樣的分詞構句，不如直接用For example就好。 : Tainan, a city that is characteristic of many historic buildings, has been : the most famous city in my country. The historic buildings in Tainan have : been the most popular spots that people must visit when they go to Tainan. : Hence, I think the historic buildings should not be destroyed because of : its economic effects. because of their economic effects. 因為前面是buildings。 : Second, historical buildings also have great educational function for : our children who live in this city. By visiting the historical buildings, : children could deeply realize the history of the city they live in, not : just only through the pictures and descriptions in their textbook. just跟only的意義重複了，可以用just就好。 pictures也可用illustration這個字，也有「插圖」之意。 : Significantly, a city sholud not destroy these historic buildings and 這裡用Significantly的意思是？你想表達的是obviously嗎？ : replace them with modern buildings base on the cultral and educational : purposes. base-->based sholud-->should cultral-->cultural 除了base以外，其他應該是單純的打錯字吧。我會建議你把based on these cultural...這個子句提到句首，表示強調。 : To sum up, given the discussions above, I strongly suggest that a city : should keep its historic buildings without any destruction. without any destruction，你想表達的意思是？因為這樣寫，我不太能理解用這個片語的意思。請參考，加油喔。 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 118.165.16.24 ※ 編輯: chileno 來自: 118.165.16.24 (06/24 21:58)