Re: [Work] TOEFL-"Parents are the best teachers"

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※ 引述《lovePhoebe (愛菲比)》之銘言： : Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. : Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. : ＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝======== : Depending on personal experience, personality type and emotional concern, : we find that some people hold the idea that parents are the best teachers : meanwhile others cast skeptical spotlight on it. However, I am of the opinion for : that parents actually are our best teachers, and the arguments for this point : are listed as follows. : The main reason for my propensity is that children will imitate what they saw ---------- a ------------------ b a. propensity => a misused word b. This could be omitted. : because of their immaturity and they don’t have ability to recognize what is --------------------------- ------ c d c. => because they are not mature enough d. Please do not make any contraction in a formal article. : for their good or bad. Take my ten-year-old brother for example. Five years : ago, my father hadn’t gotten rid of smoking, and he always smoked in front ------- -------- d f === ======= e e e. Five years ago => it is a specific period of time. Do not use perfect tense with "ago." => Five years ago, my father still had the habit of smoking. f. ... smoking. He always ... : of my brother and me at home. One day, my brother was seen to pick a : cigarette butt from the ground to his mouth by me. -------------------------------------------------------------------- g g. A change to active voice will make this sentence more idiomatic. => One day, I saw my brother pick up a cigarette butt, putting it to his mouth. : Fortunately, I run to stop him in time, ran : or I couldn’t imagine what it would happen. --------- X d => ... time. Without my timely intervention, I cannot imagine what would have become of him. : However, the bright : side of this incident it that my father has given up smoking since that time. is -------------------- h h. => decided to quit smoking : Another reason is that kids learn truth which treats people handles matters ------------------------------ i : at the circumstances where they grow up. i. It is NOT an English phrase/idiom! Thus, the whole sentence would not be understood by native English speakers. You have to rephrase this sentence. : When child become adult, children adults : the experience what he went through will influence his characteristics. which : My boy friend is the best example, and he grew up from a family in which his -------- in f --------------------------------------- j : father is responsible for all the housework, which is completely different : from the traditional family, like mine. Hence, he is a thoughtful guy rather : a male chauvinism man. ^ --------------------- than k j. This could be omitted. => My boy friend is the *best* example.(really?) His father is responsbile for ... What do you mean by "which is completely different... mine"? The housework his father is responsible for is different from that in your family? If not, you have to rephrase the whole sentence. k. => a male chauvinist : According to the above-mentioned, I totally agree with that parents : are our best teachers. : Whatever they did is beneficial or detrimental, : and we still could learn the bright side and took them as warning. This sentence reads odd. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 220.134.53.250