Re: [[寫作班] 托福第30週 citc

看板ST-English (英文科技寫作)作者 (Dee)時間16年前 (2009/03/07 10:29), 編輯推噓1(104)
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※ 引述《citc (leo)》之銘言: : Choose one of the following topics: : : 1. Some people believe that students should be given one long vacation each : : year. Others believe that students should have several short vacations : : throughout the year. Which viewpoint do you agree with? : ______________________________________________________________________________ : As time goes by, people pay more and more attention on the quality of living. to : Even for students, school usually arranges the break after studying. People ^the : have different opinion toward period of the vacation. Some people consider opinions ^^^^^^the duration : that long vacation is suitable for students to plan trips. Students can learn : something that can't learn from courses. On the other hand, some people cannot be learned : prefer the short vacation rather than long vacation. People think that ^the : short vacation can easily help recover the energy and refresh the spirit ^a ^and sufficiently* : without long time. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ "without long time" is implied by "short" vacation, and is redundant. I suggest adding 'sufficiently' to the previous part for emphasis. : In my opinion, I prefer the latter opinion because there are two reasons : following. : First of all, the vacation emphasize on the quality but the period. Some the long vacation emphasizes not quality but duration. : students have no idea to arrange the vacation and easily waste time. ^how : Parents usually are so busy in working that can't pay full attention to ^they : their plans. Take my summer vacation of the elementary school as an example, : I remember that I often watched TV for all day and just took a rest to eat, : and then went back to watch TV. The repeated activities were meaningful ^^^^^^^^^^? Then perhaps they were not really meaningful? Maybe you could just say, "My activities were repetitive because I did not know how to plan my vacation." : because I do not know how to plan my vacation. did : However, the short break is enough for recovery of exhausted physical and ^the : mental bodies whether outside activities or sleeping at home. states ("mental body" may be a contradiction) : Secondly, the short vacation makes students hardly forget the learning ^^^^^^^^^^^^ what they have learned : in school. : That the long vacation that isolated students from schools makes students xxxx xxxx isolates x and makes them : uneasily to concentrate on studying. They might distract with the TV program uneasy They might become distracted by TV programs : and video games that have contacted with them for all vacation and have the are accessible for them develop : bad inhabit that hardly get rid of. The long time easily make people develop habits are hard to get rid of makes : the habit unconsciously. For instance, I felt tired of studying in the : morning because it is the time that I still slept in the vacation. was : By this way, that will affect the efficiency of learning. "My efficiency of learning was affected" connects well from the previous sentence. : To sum up, although long vacation is more convenient to travel and join ^the makes it more convenient... ^^^^ participate in : extracurricular activity, the short break is more advantageous than the long activities : vacation. I agree that students should have several short vacations. : 謝謝大大耐心的看完 ~ -- 一個 學術英文寫作 領域的討論板 在 PTT (telnet:ptt.cc〉 【 分組討論區 】 --> 11 國家研究院 政治, 文學, 學術 --> 科學學術研究院 --> 學術總合研究中心 --> ★ST-English PTT 學術英文/論文寫作班 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 24.83.235.248

03/07 12:10, , 1F
Thank you a lot~ I have a lot of problem in grammar ><
03/07 12:10, 1F

03/07 12:12, , 2F
I should check that in first. Sorry~
03/07 12:12, 2F

03/08 00:25, , 3F
There is no need to say sorry - editing is our job here!
03/08 00:25, 3F

03/08 00:26, , 4F
In the real exam, there is little time for checking,
03/08 00:26, 4F

03/08 00:26, , 5F
that's why it's helpful to practice here!
03/08 00:26, 5F
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