Re: [請益] 寫作要怎麼破20呢?

看板TOEFL_iBT (TOEFL_iBT托福)作者 (behere)時間10年前 (2015/06/28 17:30), 編輯推噓0(0015)
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補上小弟的綜合寫作文章 考滿分TPO29 The professor and the article are both discussing the Edmontosaurus migration hypothesis. However, the speaker on the lecture disagrees with the ideas in the reading article for several reason. He believes that the Edmontosaurus did not survived the winter by migrating south to more hospitable regions. The first reason why the professor disagrees with the reading is because of the edmontosaurs's diet. Although the reading claims that the no plants could grow during the cold and dark North Slope, the man says that the North Slope was warmer in a million years ago. He also mentions that the sunlight was 24 hour per day. Therefore, the lecturer believes that edomontosaurs's diet did not prove the migration hypothesis. Second, the lecturer refutes the reading passage by mentioning the edomontosaurs lived in herd. Though the article claims that the migratory animals also live in herds, the man says that there was others reason lived in herds. He also takes Lasaval Elck for example. Hence, the professor in the lecture concludes that the edomontosaurs lived in herds do not means that the migration hypothesis. The third reason why the professor in the lecture disagrees with the reading article is related ti the capable of migrating long distance. While the reading holds that the edomontosaurs could run fast, the man mentions that onlt the adult edomontosaurs had the locomotive power. He also notes that the not adult edomontosaurs could slow the herd. Hence, the speaker in the lecture concludes that the capable of migrating the long do not support the migration hypothesis. Finally the lecturer believes disagrees with the points in the reading. He believes that Edmontosaurus did not survived the winter by migrating south to more hospitable regions. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc), 來自: 218.173.70.144 ※ 文章網址: https://www.ptt.cc/bbs/TOEFL_iBT/M.1435483817.A.DC7.html

06/28 17:48, , 1F
你的文法錯誤太多了 錯字也是 不要想拚字數 重點不在量
06/28 17:48, 1F

06/28 17:49, , 2F
而且可以看出你單字量十分不足 試著自己琢磨修改
06/28 17:49, 2F

06/28 17:53, , 3F
單字量是還好 只是代名詞的問題很大 我看得都很頭痛
06/28 17:53, 3F

06/28 17:53, , 4F
Alought S+V, S+V. 這種句子的主詞請用同一性質的
06/28 17:53, 4F

06/28 17:54, , 5F
你的although第一句用article當主詞 第二句用man 超怪
06/28 17:54, 5F

06/28 17:55, , 6F
另外the man又是誰? 然後文法要再多加強...
06/28 17:55, 6F

06/28 17:57, , 7F
代名詞的問題有速解 作文中只用author跟lecturer就好 萬用!
06/28 17:57, 7F

06/28 17:57, , 8F
其他professor什麼的都捨棄
06/28 17:57, 8F

06/28 17:58, , 9F
文章中提到he/she時才能快速知道指向author或者lecture
06/28 17:58, 9F

06/28 17:59, , 10F
更正 lecture -> lecturer
06/28 17:59, 10F

06/28 17:59, , 11F
我回一篇文好了
06/28 17:59, 11F

06/28 22:36, , 12F
先不管單字量或語句複雜度 文法錯太多了
06/28 22:36, 12F

06/29 01:23, , 13F
我記得一篇錯超過5個文法錯誤就很難破20
06/29 01:23, 13F

06/29 01:28, , 14F
可以花錢請人幫改呀,改個五篇應該提升會滿大的
06/29 01:28, 14F

06/30 14:45, , 15F
請問高雄有哪裡可以請人改的呢?
06/30 14:45, 15F
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