[請益] 快被外國老師搞混了求教Argument Essay寫作

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如題小弟最近在外國讀語言學校雖然是語言的不同文法用詞習慣讓我寫英文文章一直受到挫折但最近寫Argument Essay一直跟老師有疑惑的點對不上以下是小弟目前草稿 Gender Topless Equality Have you ever thought that it is strange that only men can be topless? In fact, the attitudes toward women’s bodies are still conservative. For example, social media, like Instagram, prohibits any pictures with women’s nipples, but Instagram requires “every” user to wear clothes. In 2015, Adda Smardottir, a student, held the activity “Free the nipple”. She argued with the unfair standard of social media. In short, currently, some people still cannot accept topless women, but actually, bare breasts are not as bad as most people think, and this argument can be made on three sides, gender equality, social media, and patriarchy. Gender topless equality is really a part of gender equality. In our daily life, women always wear bras and cover their breasts. Some people think that it is common, while some people think that it is illogical. Steinfeld (2017) claimed that women have totally different opinions to whether they can show their breasts. These differences depend on how they were born and grew up. Most of all, it is true that attitudes toward genders, especially when topless, are not equality. However, Steinfeld (2017) showed that in some cultures around the world, like aboriginal communities, women go topless to this day. Hence, topless women might not be bad as some people think, and not every person can not accept topless women. Actually, male and female breasts are similar in composition, and breasts are just parts of people, but society just rejects women’s breasts. It is unreasonable, and the right of topless really belongs to women. Only when women really have the right to decide whether they show their breasts, Gender equality will exist. In social media, pictures with topless women are not allowed to be posted. Wheeling (2015) showed that Facebook and Instagram have the double standard when judging pictures with bare humans, and many users’ accounts are closed due the rule of posting pictures. Moreover, Steinfeld (2017) claimed that the reason why Facebook banned the topless pictures is that Facebook thought that some audiences may be sensitive to the pictures. It is necessary to consider users’ positions. However, Fischtein (2015) mentioned that people aged 60 and over were least accepting of female topless behavior. It is because older people tend to be more conservative. It means that the most main users of social media, younger peoples, accept topless women more than older people. For another, Steinfeld (2017) claimed that the laws of public indecency are nebulous, so people can explain them in their own ways. In conclusion, the reason why Facebook banned users is not very reasonable, because just minority users can not accept pictures with topless women, but they really have a choice to reject them. In addition, to argue this controversial phenomenon, artists created the image of “an acceptable nipple”, a male nipple for people to paste it on their topless pictures. Hundreds years ago, people were in a patriarchy. Wheelng (2015) also claimed that women are more likely to be treated as sex objects. Patriarchy is a social system in which men have all the power. The society was controlled by men, and women were just properties of men. In addition, some people do not care that women are being dominated by men, and some women even promote this situations to others, including their daughters. Even in modern times, some people still treat women as sex objects. It causes the belief that women’s bodies are sexual and should be covered. However, this concept of females is really out of date, because in women’s view, men’s bodies are also sexual, but topless men can be accepted and not against the law of public indecency. To eliminate the bad tradition from patriarchy, the unfair attitudes toward women must be changed. In short, women really have right to show their breasts in public. There are many concepts of this topic in three sides, gender equality, social media, and patriarchy. Compared to attitudes toward topless men, attitudes toward topless women are too biased. Now, advanced countries are working for gender equality, but just the view of sex is still conservative. In social media, the double standard toward different genders is unreasonable. For another, patriarchy has limited a lot of women’s rights for a long time, and it is time to change this unreasonable situation. In conclusion, gender topless equality is necessary and represents an important process of women’s right. If women can show themselves without bias, the relationship between different genders would be better, and the society would be kinder and fairer to women. 因為要用到APA格式引用的關係找兩方觀點相關的文章已經很頭大了卻更被說"沒看到三個side的各兩方論點" 雖然列給老師看了但跟他說還是一個頭兩個大尤其在Social media那一段老師是說沒兩方點但我是要反駁"Facebook方的想法" 是因為我說得太委婉嗎(同學表示) 還是Organization上的問題呢(不習慣的點) 因為老師一直跳針的點是他不清楚哪個點但跟他問了很久他卻也只是說不行所以想請各位提供意見感謝 -- 推 gaym19: 文西就是要有大推 melzard: 天推 gfhnrtjpoiuy: 中推 zero6410: 婦推 darkdixen: 華推 Mosasaurus: 羅

[請益] 快被外國老師搞混了 求教Argument Essay寫作

[請益] 快被外國老師搞混了求教Argument Essay寫作