[Ask ] I need advice about my composition

看板EngTalk (全英文聊天)作者 (獨特)時間17年前 (2008/12/05 18:21), 編輯推噓1(103)
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Below is my composition : Topic : Why are you a night owl? I am a night owl, being a night person has several advantages. First, it is quiet at night so I can concentrate on my study. Night is more peaceful and I am not afraid of being bothered by someone or something. For example, I don’t have to worry about any of my friends will ask me out when I am doing my work. The next advantage is that night is beautiful and tranquil ; in other words, night cleanses my thoughts of tiredness. After working long hours, I can walk on the street and bath with moonlight. Soon I seem to have energy to face another challenge in high spirits. In addition, I can breathe fresh air outside and the air at night is much better than that of daytime because of fewer cars at midnight. Furthermore, while I stay up late reading until dawn, I can not only see the sunrise but also eat a bountiful breakfast. After that, I take a stroll as exercise. Indeed, at night, it is not easy to be disturbed by someone or something and I can control rhythms much better than daytime. This is why I am a night owl. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 140.112.19.177

12/05 18:21, , 1F
Thanks!!
12/05 18:21, 1F

12/06 04:14, , 2F
i think the 3rd sentence could be altered "Night is
12/06 04:14, 2F

12/06 04:14, , 3F
more peaceful and I can avoid botheration of someone
12/06 04:14, 3F

12/06 04:15, , 4F
or something.
12/06 04:15, 4F
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文章代碼(AID): #19EG2Q6s (EngTalk)