Re: [寫作班]第二週 找工作計畫 anythingwhat
※ 引述《anythingwhat (琉璃)》之銘言：
: A Plan of finding a job
: I want to get a job of management manger.
: First about professional ability
: So when I was a student in college, I would read about management’s magazines in library twice a week.
: With teachers discussed cases of some corporations.
這一段很明顯是用中文思考，直接用中文對應英文字寫出來的。
所以看不到英文應有的文法架構。
但其實不用改動太多，把正確的架構放進去，
就可以表達得很漂亮。
I want to get the job as a manager.
Therefore, the first thing to improve is my expertise.
As a student in college, I plan to read magazines on management,
and discuss cases of corporations with my teachers.
這樣寫是就表達的內容簡單修正，
當然，如果要寫得更漂亮，內容就得更充實才行。
例如第三句：
As a student in college, I would like to take the advantages of
the academic resources provided by the school, and blah blah blah...
: After class, I spent three hours for working. It would get salary by working.
: The salary was not rich.
這段主要是時態的問題。講的是未來的事，
為什麼會用過去式表達呢？
: But the value is achievement feeling and establish later to work the foundation ability.
這段也是用中文思考的結果。而且是以「字」為單位思考出現的狀況。
至少要以「詞」為單位來翻譯才會有個樣子，
以「句」來思考才會比較正確。
至於更高段的以「段」來思考，那已經不只是英文的問題了，
中文寫作也得要好才行。
The rewards will be a sense of achievement, and the establishment
of foundamental abilities for later works.
: Second about the language ability
: I hope I can work in foreign company.
基本文法問題。
The second is my language ability. （proficiency會更好。)
I hope I can work in a foreign company in the future,
so language, in my opinion, is important.
（要更漂亮的話，可寫...is of great importance）
用的字沒有差很多，只是照文法規則擺而已，但效果會不一樣。
: So I think the language is the important thing.
: Remembered 50 vocabulary and phrase a day and read 1 article of English in a week.
: And take examines in English to quiz the language ability of mine.
: The two things is my plan of finding a job.
這也是文法跟時態的問題，另外還有數量一致性的錯誤。
英文句子主詞跟動詞不能省，而表達計畫多用不定詞。
I plan to memorize 50 new words and phrases a day, and read
one English article each week. I would take exams in English
to test my language ability.
These two items make up my plan of finding a job.
: 我基礎寫作真的不太好，但是我會努力練習寫作！
: 或許在這篇文章裡面會出現很多錯誤！但是我會加油！
: 希望在畢業時我也可以交出一篇英文專題出來！這是我的目標~
: 謝謝各位
加油，沒有人一開始就很強的，一定要多多練習喔！
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