[寫作班]托福第四周 mingtai-5

看板ST-English (英文科技寫作)作者 (綠豆嘉義人)時間16年前 (2008/03/12 03:21), 編輯推噓1(101)
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文章有點長. 這次嘗試了比較多樣的句型, 有錯的或是任何意見還有勞大家幫忙提出. Thank you! :) Subject: It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. Text: In my opinion, growing up in the countryside, though sort of objective due to my personal experience of my childhood, benefits more than growing up in a big city. The most important things for children or teenagers are firstly, to receive education and secondly, to develop completeness both physically and mentally and thirdly, to grow up in a family of love. In my view, whether one receives fundamental educations in the countryside or a big city makes little difference. Educations preceding those taught in colleges during one's student career are quite similar, since no matter where the schools are, what is taught is mainly based on the policy of Ministry of Education. As for the second reason-to develop physical and mental completeness, I would strongly suggest children to stay in the countryside, for the sake that it is less developed than a big city, it contains more space for leisure activities, its environment less polluted and is therefore more suitable for well-development of children's physical and mental completeness. In the countryside, you can find it easy to run a kite, ride a bike or play ball games wherever you want, for there is huge space, for there are no crowds to compete so you do not really need to make a reservation or route a long way to find a piece of available space, which usually cannot be avoided in a big city. Last but not least, growing up in a family of love, as I think the most important one among the three points stated, is more likely to be accomplished in the countryside. This may seem quite controversial, but it's a time-proven fact that parents living in a big city tend to pay too much attention to their works and consequently ignore their children, which is a major factor of why teenagers start to become ill-behaved. To sum up, living in a rural area is definitely worthwhile for children's benefit anyway. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 140.109.227.99 ※ 編輯: mingtai1 來自: 140.109.227.99 (03/12 03:24) ※ 編輯: mingtai1 來自: 140.109.227.99 (03/12 03:31)

03/12 21:44, , 1F
I love your writing. Hope I can do better as you do. ^^
03/12 21:44, 1F

03/12 22:50, , 2F
Thanks for your appreciation^^ let's make it together
03/12 22:50, 2F
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