Re: [寫作班] 托福第11週 kapolo-1

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※ 引述《kapolo (膚淺國度)》之銘言： : ※ 引述《dvlin (Dee)》之銘言： : : Choose one of the following five topics. : : 1. Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or : : chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. : : In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons : : and examples to support your answer. : People are eager to become success in their life. Some of them doing risky successful lives ^^^^^^^^^^^ : chances, the others believe that success result from careful planning. I ^^^^^^^ xxx results "take chances" or "take risks" : suspect both of the factors having their importance status. If we want to xxxxxx have xxxxxx : success without careful planning, the risky we have to face will too large to succeed risks ^be : stand. We should taking risks under the careful planning. take xxx : Just like the others great people. Edison is the most well known inventor xxx other , well-known : all over the world. He had planed to invent the light bulb. After he was ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^ in the world : trying thousands of different materials for the bulb filaments in vain, ^^^^^^ tried : he tried to use the carbon filament in bulb. His success is not only by : his planning, but also his risky trying. ^^^^^^^^^^^^* *Perhaps you could be a little more specific? e.g., his eagerness to experiment? : On the other hand, if people are taking risks without careful plan, their planning : successes will be vanishing at any time. These people put themselves in xx ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ xx could vanish? : danger and playing dice with the chance. It is no difference between these play xxx There : people and gambler. s : In conclusion, people should make the well prepare with their best effort ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ : taking the unpredictable chances. It is better than people just taking risks ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ What do you mean? : randomly. Your writing is very strong in content and details. However, most of your grammatic errors are repetitions of the same things. There are a couple of things to pay attention to: 1. 成功 (v.) succeed ; (n.) success ; (adj.) successful 2. Beware of incomplete sentences. In English and most Western languages, every independent clause (獨立子句?) must be a complete sentence. Therefore, the Verb is King. Always check to see if there is a verb in one of its finite forms in every sentence. The finite form is, for example, "take", "takes", or "took" (showing person, number, or tense), whereas "taking" is not. In progressive tense, e.g., "are taking", "are" is a finite form. -- 一個學術英文寫作領域的討論板在 PTT （telnet:ptt.cc〉【分組討論區】 --> 11 國家研究院政治, 文學, 學術 --> 科學學術研究院 --> 學術總合研究中心 --> ★ST-English PTT 學術英文/論文寫作班 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 99.231.10.180 ※ 編輯: dvlin 來自: 99.231.10.180 (05/16 00:32) ※ 編輯: dvlin 來自: 99.231.10.180 (05/16 00:33)