Re: [轉錄]Re: [寫作班] 托福第13週 Xinlong 4
: Good try!
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Thanks
Let me edit my essay.
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Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others
prefer to work for an employer. I personally would like to work for an
employer in a small company at first. Because I am young and has no
experience and practice in work, working in a small company is easier then in
a big company.
: notice the use of noun , adv., and adj.
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I always confuse with adv. and adj., I will try to understand.
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If I work for an small company for some period of time, I will learn more
knacks and skills. Other benefit for working in small company is I will
learn to do all the things by myself (from the beginning to the end). I
will improve technique of conversation with my coworker, client and boss.
: in Chinese, "you" and "I" are often used for the same meaning.
: like 如果你去怎樣怎樣，你就會怎樣 actully means that如果我....我就....
: so, remain CONSISTANT. You're talking about yourself.
: Use "I" instead of "you."
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like this?
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After I have enough experience and skills. I can work for myself on the
stuff I interested or even own a business. Neither work for an employer nor
own a business, I will sufficient for my job, because I think working is not
only handsome money but also need to be interesting and enjoy.
: Please always consider the connection of your essay and the topic.
: The last 2 sentences seem to have nothing to do with the topic?
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Maybe get better?
Thank for your advice.
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