Re: [寫作班] 托福第14週 TAKY, 3

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※ 引述《TAKY (Keep Walking)》之銘言： : 3. If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire: : an inexperienced worker at a lower salary or an experienced worker at a : higher salary? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. : Workers is the most important sources of a company. It is very important to are : choose right workers. In my opinion, I prefer choose an experienced worker employ ^to -------------redundant: the essay is already "your" opinion : at a higher salary. Here are some reasons why. -------------------------colloquial : In the first place, because the practiced workers have plenty of experiences ---------not used ---------much x very often ------------------it means "in the beginning." It doesn't seem to fit the context. I think "firstly" is just fine. : and professional skills, they are able to efficiently deal with any tasks. : They can increase the power of company soon and provide other -----? ^the ------------- : colleagues for their help. For example, if company directors want to employ -------------------------and help other colleagues in need. : a electrical engineering, they are supposed that the employee is competent an ^technician they "suppose that the employee might be competent and well-skilled" : and well skilled. Therefore, these workers are able to take immediate --------------awkward : advantages to company and to supplement the disadvantages of the ---------- ^the : company. : In the second place, it is more economical for a company to hire a -------------------still wrong usage an : experienced worker than to hire an inexperienced freshman. The training : courses and fees are required to novices; however, for a well experienced : expert, he is ready to take up a challenge. A freshman can not only help not only can't : company to solve problems but also have to use the company resources. ^the (to) -----------consumes the resources of the company. : Most company have three months training periods for their new coming companies spend xxxxxxxxxxx xxxxxx : employees and ,at the same time, the company is still necessary to pay , at companies are still paying these : these freshmen salary . In the aspect of economic, it is very unwise for a freshmen. xxxxxx -------------------------weird : company to employ novice rather than an experienced worker. : In conclusion, it is more advantageous for a company to hire an experienced : worker than to hire an inexperienced worker. Well experienced worker can An well-experienced : take immediate benefit to the company and to help other workers in the ----wrong verb xx : company. Besides, the company is also able to save expense of training. ^the : Therefore, if I were the boss of a company, I would hire experienced ^an : worker at a higher salary rather than an inexperienced worker at a lower : salary. * General comments: I think the essay is good. Your points are clear─though the ideas are quite common and lack creativity─and you do explain the reasons for employing experienced workers. For your reference. ^^; fleuve -- 然後有一天我ꄠ 靠在窗前，會發現原來我是株 ╭╮──╪──╭╮ 不＊ fleuve ＊需要陽光的植物︴1mK︴30m直到有一天我閉上眼睛 ╰╯──╪──╰╯ 看不見自己、卻可以看見你…ꄠ ♂ -- ※ 編輯: fleuve 來自: 118.168.33.204 (06/29 15:44)