Re: [寫作班] 托福第15週,smallsheep24,1

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※ 引述《smallsheep24 (妮妮)》之銘言： : : Some people think that the automobile has improved modern life. Others think : : that the automobile has caused serious problems. What is your opinion? Use : : specific reasons and examples to support your answer. : Although the automobile improves our life with the convenience and lives xxx : efficiency, I still support the statement that the automobile has caused : serious problems. Air pollution and noise problems expose the modern people : under not only physical but mental risks. In addition, the car is definitely to : one of the factors make our earth becomes more and more fragile. Besides, the that makes become : increasing numbers of car accidents deprives people from loved person and number loved ones : money. We should pay attention to this problem than anytime before. ^more : Some people may think the automobile is necessary evil, and I can not ^a : deny that. However, the exhausted gas released by the automobile results the in : serious air pollution. CO2 is one of the major greenhouse gases, it cause the . It causes : temperature on earth rises and the glaciers in pole melt, even the weather to rise, the graciers in the poles to melt, and the : becomes unstable. And when the gasoline incompletely combusts, CO comes out. climate to become unstable. : CO damages our respiration system and stimulates the nasal mucosa, which : leads a result of asthma and even worse, the cancers. These problems are ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^ "leads to a result of" or "results in" *just "cancer" is ok. : really serious and upsetting many of us. ^to/for : Second, the automobile affect our mental healthy. For example, the noise health : problem is quite big. Modern people are more stressful than anytime before. ^^^I suggest a more concise word or phrase like "serious". : Try to imagine, what will you react if the first sound in the morning you how would : hear is the horn of the car. I think it is quite disgusting. This heard was : uncomfortable sound can not only affect our mood but, in fact, can cause many : mental diseases like the melancholia and insomnia. Besides, it is common to : get in a traffic jam, we waste time and lost our patience. This is really ^and : awful and we should take this problem seriously. : Last but not the least, with the increasing numbers of cars running on x : the road, car accidents are dispensable. According to the statistics of the : past ten years, in one month average one person would die in the car accident ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ On average, one person dies... on each street every month. : on each street. Lots of families are heart-broken and lose their beloved. So : how can we not to give weight to this problem! ? (rhetorical question) : To my mind, the automobile indeed has its importance, but how the : government try to solve the problem, maybe develop more public transportation : and cut down the number of cars is really necessary. The automobile bring the xxx : air and noise pollution, damage our health and risks our earth and beloved. : Everyone should pay attention to this serious problem. -- 一個學術英文寫作領域的討論板在 PTT （telnet:ptt.cc〉【分組討論區】 --> 11 國家研究院政治, 文學, 學術 --> 科學學術研究院 --> 學術總合研究中心 --> ★ST-English PTT 學術英文/論文寫作班 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 70.79.36.70