Re: [寫作班]托福第17週baimomo2030,5

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※ 引述《baimomo2030 (小草)》之銘言： : Whether the Internet is an angle or a devil in human’s life? Some people ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^* *This is not a complete sentence. Correction: "Is the Internet an angel or a devil in human life?" : believe that the Internet creates problems because it has violent and erotic : information which influence children fiercely and caused a single world influences causes : culture. However I disagree it. From my point of view, the Internet provides , xx : people lots of useful messages. There are two reasons to support my viewpoint. ^with : First of all, the Internet creates a globalized world. Before the development : of the Internet, people only could realize the society where they lived. : After the Internet developed, people started to contact the whole world. : People can “visit” the Pyramid through the internet. Buying Louis Vuitton ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ : but did not go to Paris. For example, the stock market is associated with the ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^* Incomplete sentence "People bought LV products without going to Paris." : economic globalization. If the stock market in United States is fluctuated, fluctuates : and so on in Taiwan. Through the Internet, people can understand the xxx so does the stock market in Taiwan. : situation rapidly, and take the best solution in the local stock market. : Second, the Internet just likes a jungle where you can find out almost is just like xxx : everything what you want. Not only the railway time schedule you can find, anything you want. Not only can you find the railway time schedule, : but also the data about the term papers. For example, the famous website, xxx for xxx ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ : Wikipedia. Almost, you could search any kind of knowledge in its database. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^* *Combine to make a complete sentence: "For example, Wikipedia, a famous website, has all kinds of knowledge in its searchable database." : For a senior high school student, he or she does not have to find the : material in the huge library. For a university student, he or she does not : have to worry the book what she or he needs has already been borrowed. : To conclude, while many people worried about the Internet “invaded” the worry invading xxx : life and caused problems. Nevertheless, I believe that the Internet would causing , xxxxxxxxxxxx : afford the information rightly and provide more convenient life to human. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ what does this mean? A prevalent problem in this essay is the difficulty for you to construct complete sentences. You did not have the same problem in your previous essay. Were you pressed for time when you wrote this one? -- 一個學術英文寫作領域的討論板在 PTT （telnet:ptt.cc〉【分組討論區】 --> 11 國家研究院政治, 文學, 學術 --> 科學學術研究院 --> 學術總合研究中心 --> ★ST-English PTT 學術英文/論文寫作班 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 70.79.36.70 ※ 編輯: dvlin 來自: 70.79.36.70 (08/21 02:21)