Re: [寫作班] 托福第40週 (muffinman, 3)

看板ST-English (英文科技寫作)作者fleuve (:D)時間15年前 (2009/08/08 19:00)推噓1(1推 0噓 0→)

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※ 引述《muffinman ()》之銘言： : 3. Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people : prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? : Some people enjoy having a good time with friends or family in a fancy : restaurant or a casual food stand. Other people like to prepare and eat : food at home. There are advantages in both choices; however, I prefer to : stay at home and have a light meal alone or with my family and friends. It's an acceptable introduction. But if I'm picky enough to point out some problems, I would suggest you delete the first two sentences and replace them with something else, since the first two sentences are no more than repeating what has been stated in the essay question.^^ : Enjoying the cozy atmosphere is the main reason why I prefer to stay at (that) : home. The food preparing by my mother or with family makes me feel worm prepared warm The food prepared by my mother makes me feel warm → sounds awakard though seems to be grammatical The food with family makes me feel warm → ????? : as well as being taken care of. After the preparing, family members have ^^^^^^^^^^^^^?? : the meals and share their anecdotes after this day or complain their meal ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^expression sounds weird : problems from work or school. At home, you may relax and be free from the complain about the problems they you may (feel relaxed) and free from encountered during the day. : interferences from the others. On the contrary, going to food stands or : restaurants after work is a bit tiring for exhausted people. While there ^the But isn't preparing for dinner also an exhausting work so that many people would rather eat outside instead of cooking by themselves? : are such disadvantages as doing the preparing and the cleaning work, : staying at home is still a more comfortable way to have meals. Here you respond to the question that I proposed to ask in the previous sentence, but you still provide no proof why staying at home is still a more comfortable way to have the meal. Your argument sounds circular that "staying at home is still better because staying at home is comfortable." : Another reason for the choice is that the food at home is generally safe : and clean. It's true that foods stands or restaurants might provide food food : both delicious and clean, but you never know if they wash their hands : before cooking or not. Eating at home definitely guarantees a safer meal. Good. Here you make a concession and provide an explanation why you think the food prepared at home is generally safer. : What’s more, the prices of the restaurants range from very low to : extremely high. The wiser way to save your money is to buy cheap : ingredients and cook at home. Ultimately, for some people to go out alone going : is somewhat an embarrassment. For instance, have you ever seen there is a : table with only one chair? With a comparison with the dining people have : companions, eating alone stirs a sense of loneliness sometimes. A lonely implies : person might prefer to stay at home lest himself/ herself feel ill at To avoid awkwardness of agreement, you can change "person" to "people" : ease. : If you ask me where I prefer to go to have my meals, the answer would xx xx : absolutely be at home. For that I could do anything and make any gesture ??????? : I want during the dining time. It’s just a matter of free and easy. ^to ???? ???? "Free" and "easy" are not nouns. -- 生命的意義不在追求答案，答案只是另一個答案的問題，生命在於去體會與經歷，不管生活在哪裡。 ╭╮───╪───╭╮ ＊ fleuve ＊ ╰╯───╪───╰╯ --