[問題] 英文自傳求修改

看板Salary (工作職場)作者 (柳七)時間13年前 (2013/02/02 11:24), 編輯推噓0(0017)
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最近正在修改英文自傳,但有一段總是修不好,請大家幫我看一下 Throughout my college life, I had some working experiences. For instance, I worked in the department of International Business as a part-time employee, which instructed me how to reply adequately with guests and treat the administration works carefully. Besides, when serving as a professor's assistant, I participate in the research project of the National Science Council and the publication of teaching assessment. These improved my data-collecting and result analysis abilities. It also makes me proactive and responsible. As to my personality is optimistic and easy-going. My parents... (後面略) 黃字是我覺得表達不順的地方,感謝 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 114.37.66.28

02/02 11:38, , 1F
aggressive後面的person刪掉
02/02 11:38, 1F
感恩~已修正

02/02 11:45, , 2F
My personality就可不是嗎 (The personality of mine)
02/02 11:45, 2F

02/02 11:48, , 3F
因為我後面接My parents....想說不要重複(<-自作聰明)
02/02 11:48, 3F

02/02 11:54, , 4F
內容要有重點比較好,可能比英文修改來的更重要。
02/02 11:54, 4F
太流水帳了嗎Orz 那我朝詳述工作內容的方式改進

02/02 12:02, , 5F
as to my personality
02/02 12:02, 5F
已修正

02/02 12:48, , 6F
aggressive這詞不好proactive可能更好
02/02 12:48, 6F

02/02 12:50, , 7F
it makes me an proactive and responsible person 或
02/02 12:50, 7F

02/02 12:51, , 8F
it makes me proactive and responsible(trustworthy)
02/02 12:51, 8F
已修正

02/02 12:51, , 9F
嗯嗯,比如幫老師作實驗設計,專利、文獻的分析等等。
02/02 12:51, 9F

02/02 12:52, , 10F
而且應該用made
02/02 12:52, 10F

02/02 12:53, , 11F
把實際參與的專案,內容用一兩句話寫出來,有發表更好。
02/02 12:53, 11F
是商科的東西,我主要是幫忙文獻分析的部分,那我再上計畫的主題內容,謝謝

02/02 12:56, , 12F
These "experience" improved my data-collecting
02/02 12:56, 12F

02/02 12:57, , 13F
analysis abilities and also made ~~experience要加s
02/02 12:57, 13F
已修正 ※ 編輯: willowtifa 來自: 114.37.66.28 (02/02 13:01)

02/05 01:39, , 14F
and treated...
02/05 01:39, 14F

02/05 01:43, , 15F
These experiences..., it also這樣不好
02/05 01:43, 15F

02/05 01:44, , 16F
these多數, it又單數.直接making me proactive and...
02/05 01:44, 16F

02/05 18:04, , 17F
一行trainee就好了 國科會助理在幹嘛 老闆很清楚
02/05 18:04, 17F
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