[履歷] 新鮮人英文求職信求批

看板Salary (工作職場)作者 (Dragon)時間9年前 (2016/12/26 15:42), 9年前編輯推噓7(8114)
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個人學經歷背景: 成大企管碩士 欲應徵之職務: Garena儲備幹部計畫 自傳履歷內容: Dear Hiring Manager, My name is ooo and ooo is my nickname. I earned my master degree in business administration from National Cheng Kung University in 2016. Garena is famous for games. However, the most attractive to me is your vision and goal. Garena not only wants to be a game provider but also wants to be a consumer internet platform provider. Just like your slogan “connecting the dots”. I always would like to be a “dot” to connect each person and make this world better together. The most important is I am so passionate about the internet and the electronic commerce. That is why I am interested in this program. In 2015, I joined (A company) during the summer vacation, the company which is running the most popular SMS app in Taiwan. In the two months, I was a member of the PR team. I assisted in holding the press conference, writing the press releases, and I had been interviewed by TV news for three times. I learned how to interact with the journalist and knew how to attract media’s attention. Moreover, I acted as the contact window for a crossover PR event. To be a good project owner, I had a responsibility to contact PR agency and our partner simultaneously to discuss and confirm every detail thing, even the color of microphone brand. In this project, I planned, developed and implemented it with my colleagues’ assistance. I learned how to make decisions quickly but carefully. I also found the importance of teamwork, so I enhance my interpersonal and organizational skills from this project. To sum up, I not only made a lot of friends in this 8 weeks, but also recognized how to work effectively and efficiently in an internet company. Two years ago, I interned as a marketing assistant at (B company). During the year. I had been working closely with senior marketing executives on several new product promotions, planning the press conference, researching the market trend and dealing with consumer feedback. In addition, I had a chance to learn what internet marketing is and how to promote the products through the internet. What impressed me the most was I made a slogan for a product and it was used on every poster and catalog. Through this internship, I have developed analytical skill and honed my knowledge of marketing and communication skill. I am an enthusiastic, pleasant and open-minded person. Therefore, my friends usually described me as a good team player. I believe that teamwork is always better than individual. And the reason I got good GPA is I am a quick learner, especially the thing about computer and the internet. Given my experience and personality, I think I am a strong candidate. I look forward to joining and contributing to your firm. A copy of my resume is enclosed for your reference. I would appreciate an opportunity to discuss my qualifications at your earliest convenience. I can be reached at 0912-345678 or via email at oooooo@hotmail.com. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, OOO -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc), 來自: 60.250.145.91 ※ 文章網址: https://www.ptt.cc/bbs/Salary/M.1482738131.A.993.html

12/26 17:34, , 1F
Could you please write down the "specific" result?
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12/26 17:35, , 2F
for example, how many public are attracted by you
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12/26 17:35, , 3F
or what kine of achievement do you fulfill?
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12/26 17:36, , 4F
the above listed is like a conversation instead of
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12/26 17:36, , 5F
a outstanding introduction
12/26 17:36, 5F
Thank for your advice.

12/26 18:56, , 6F
看的出來很努力準備內容,但求職信來講太長了,基本上
12/26 18:56, 6F

12/26 18:56, , 7F
以三段限,第一段你是透過甚麼管道知道這個職缺的信息
12/26 18:56, 7F

12/26 19:00, , 8F
應徵的動機是甚麼,然後你有甚麼能力足以勝任(用關鍵
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12/26 19:01, , 9F
字,第二段再針對第一段提到的能力做進一步詳述,第三
12/26 19:01, 9F

12/26 19:02, , 10F
段則可著重在軟性技能描述。
12/26 19:02, 10F
謝謝您的建議,我會嘗試修改的!

12/26 20:03, , 11F
你一天用四成電,愛瘋稱不了的,有充電的我看第一段就不
12/26 20:03, 11F

12/26 20:03, , 12F
想看了,好長,拜託你早點進入正題
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12/26 20:05, , 13F
你把第一段閃了,倒數第二段拿去當開頭
12/26 20:05, 13F
我會將內容縮短的,謝謝您

12/26 20:38, , 14F
你的英文有待加強
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12/26 22:32, , 15F
文法不好盡量用條列式寫重點 不然一看就錯一堆...
12/26 22:32, 15F
可以請教是哪邊文法有大錯誤嗎? 不然這樣小弟我無從更正起,謝謝二位!

12/26 22:51, , 16F
wants 重複兩次可拿掉後方的
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12/26 22:52, , 17F
the most important is I 文法錯 重寫
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12/26 22:54, , 18F
文法有些問題 找個native 幫你看 我懶得看了
12/26 22:54, 18F
謝謝您對於我文法的指教,我會再做修正的! ※ 編輯: dragon0518 (180.218.34.74), 12/26/2016 23:19:59

12/27 08:35, , 19F
文法幾乎每句都有點問題 最好上網找範例修改比較好
12/27 08:35, 19F

12/27 08:36, , 20F
不然與其一下被人看出缺點 不如不要附
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12/29 02:05, , 21F
光是第一段就有點「卡」,讀不順以致於無法讓人順利地看完
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12/29 02:05, , 22F
全部的文章!
12/29 02:05, 22F

01/05 11:20, , 23F
Google "cover letter". 會有一些範例可參考
01/05 11:20, 23F
※ 編輯: dragon0518 (60.250.145.91), 07/20/2017 13:57:02
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