Re: [請益] 用陳平模板寫作TPO電腦計分為什麼這麼低

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※ 引述《lovemom (好)》之銘言: : 請教有上過陳平老師寫作課的同學 : 我在陳平老師班上獨立寫作每次都拿4分以上 : 大多數都是4.5分以上 也有拿過5分 : 整合寫作比較差 但考到最後一次模考也有4分以上 : 我剛剛用TPO15電腦正式計分測試實力 : 寫作部分完全按照陳平老師上課方式及我之前模考的方式 : 寫起來覺得還滿順利 : 但是分數卻只有22 : 獨立寫作4分 整合寫作3分 : 怎麼會這麼低 : 比我平常模考還低不少 : 但是爬文後看到大家都說陳平老師改的比較嚴 : 也有人說陳平老師模板好用 正式考試拿到27分以上 : 那我想請問我的TPO分數為什麼跟平常陳平老師改的分數有落差 : TPO電腦計分的標準跟正式考試是差不多還是差很多呢 : 請有上過陳平老師課、有使用過TPO計分及有考過正式考試的同學幫我解答一下 : 謝謝 我貼上作文請各位強者給我意見 整合寫作 Given the arguments between the author and the lecturer about exotic cane toads' spread, the author reports that there are several measures to stop the spread of exotic cane toads in Australia. However, the lecturer casts doubt on the contents of the passage. There are three different points of views between two parties presented as follows. First, it is in terms of building a national fence that the author argues that this fence can prevent toads from moving into Australia. However, the lecturer asserts that in no way will this fence stop the spread of toads. That is, young toads and eggs are carried by the flow of water which brings toads and eggs to the other side of the waterway. Second, it is in terms of volunteers' capturing toads and destroying eggs that the author confirms that young toads and eggs are easier to catch and damage. Nevertheless, the lecturer contends that untrained volunteers will damage native endangered frogs. In fact, young toads are indiscriminative to native frogs. Third, it is in terms of developing virus that the author maintains that the virus will only harm cane toads, which prevents cane toads from maturing and reproducing. Nonetheless, the lecturer claims that the virus will be detrimental to the habitats of reptiles and amphibians. In other words, the virus is harmful to native cane toads which are vital to ecological system. 獨立寫作 Given the arguments between agreeing or disagreeing with the statement that in order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age, which one do I choose? It is assumed that the answer is negative. However, I absolutely agree that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age in order to become financially responsible adults. There are three reasons presented as follows. First, it is in terms of children's making their own financial budgets that they will become financially responsible adults. For example, only when children take part-time jobs, do they understand it is difficult to make money on their own. Therefore, they will tend to make financial projects which can balance income and expenses appropriately in advance. In other words, through this training, children will use their money efficiently and economically. Second, it is in terms of children's preparing for future living that they will become financially responsible adults. For instance, once children become adults in the future, they will need to make their own living to survive. That is, the more working experience they undergo when they are children, the better performance they will accomplish when they are adults. As a result, not only can children be accustomed to earning money by themselves, but also they can enjoy better living qualities in the future. Third, it is in terms of developing children's financial independence that they will become financially responsible adults. Namely, on no account can children rely on their parents permanently. In fact, children should become financially independent as soon as possible. On the contrary, if children don't learn to be financially responsible, they may suffer from dissatisfaction and depression when they become adults. In conclusion, I totally agree that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age in order to become financially responsible adults for several reasons, among them children's making their own financial budgets, their preparing for future living, and developing their financial independence. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 114.45.184.40

05/22 22:22, , 1F
我只覺得在美加補習的這麼多 每個人都用這個模版
05/22 22:22, 1F

05/22 22:23, , 2F
ETS改的應該都快吐了吧
05/22 22:23, 2F

05/22 22:50, , 3F
好多 it is in terms of
05/22 22:50, 3F

05/23 02:26, , 4F
整合寫作的第一句Given the arguments between......
05/23 02:26, 4F

05/23 02:28, , 5F
是修飾誰?你逗點後面接的主詞是the author
05/23 02:28, 5F

05/23 02:31, , 6F
但是感覺不太對,
05/23 02:31, 6F

05/23 02:31, , 7F
因為評估arguments的人應該是你而不是the author
05/23 02:31, 7F

05/23 02:33, , 8F
建議你整合寫作第一句拿掉不要用
05/23 02:33, 8F

05/23 02:35, , 9F
獨立寫作其實更奇怪,
05/23 02:35, 9F

05/23 02:36, , 10F
因為第一句Given the arguments between......
05/23 02:36, 10F

05/23 02:37, , 11F
後面沒有修飾對象,硬要說有的話便成逗點後面的which...
05/23 02:37, 11F

05/23 02:38, , 12F
建議你獨立寫作第一句直接從I absolutely agree that..
05/23 02:38, 12F

05/23 02:38, , 13F
那句開始就好了
05/23 02:38, 13F

05/23 02:42, , 14F
而且你的獨立寫作題目在第一段就抄了兩次,
05/23 02:42, 14F

05/23 02:43, , 15F
實在太冗長和多餘了
05/23 02:43, 15F

05/23 02:44, , 16F
再來就像三樓講的,
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05/23 02:44, , 17F
你每一段都用it is in terms of開頭,
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05/23 02:44, , 18F
實在太呆版和僵硬了
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05/23 11:17, , 19F
最後一段 只有一句? XD
05/23 11:17, 19F

05/23 19:44, , 20F
果然某老師酸得不是沒有道理的....
05/23 19:44, 20F
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