[Ask ] help me to correct my essay plz

看板EngTalk (全英文聊天)作者Eisely (im tired of everything.)時間13年前 (2012/09/08 00:27)推噓0(0推 0噓 0→)

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im gonna post this on 104 human resource agency as my autobiography, can someone help me to correct the mistakes? thx... Hello, my name is Eddie. I graduated from ABC University Department of Applied Foreign Languages. When I was a senior high school student, I majored in Food and Beverage Management from CBA Vocational High School. I just retired from R.O.C Army and looking for my first job which is suitable for me. During my school life, I got several experiences of part-time job. Such as catering service, copy editor, internet marketing, I also kept a stall to sell food at night market. These experiences not only made me realize how hard to earn money, but also understand where is effort, where is success. With pleasure, classmates voted for me as class leader, club leader and the host of welcome party for freshmen. I found out it’s not that easy to manage the whole class. When you’re a leader, you have to accept more responsibility. By the experience of being a host, I learned how to handle the groove and atmosphere. That’s why people said one minute on the stage and ten years of practice off the stage. I'm interested in taking photos, so I joined photography club in my first year of college life. I met a lot of photo aficionados there, we shared and taugh each other. Besides the curriculum planning made me learn English step by step, I also participated in English symposium and English graduation performance to improve my English speaking ability and spontaneity. Nowadays, everyone cares about high efficiency, high quality services and English ability. I have three years professional catering management training and English education for more than four years. My major and experience make me qualified for this position. If I have the honor to be the member of your company, I will try my best to bring the most out of talented in your company. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 111.254.187.102