Re: [寫作班] 減肥計畫 biolenz

看板ST-English (英文科技寫作)作者chileno (月月)時間17年前 (2007/10/27 10:38)推噓1(1推 0噓 1→)

留言2則, 1人參與討論串2/4 (看更多)

※ 引述《biolenz (lenz)》之銘言： : A chemical based keeping fit method, BowNiSo, for losing weight 記得要用hyphen。 A chemical-based method for keeping fit : The overweight of body has been proved to have high risk involved 1."The overweight of body"有obesity，肥胖症這個字可以用。 2. to have high risk involved in有點怪，我會用a major risk factor for cardiac diseases<--要用複數 : in cardiac disease. In social consideration, the bad body shape also makes ^^^ I would say "poor" : people to be unconfident. However, to date, no effective method for keeping ^^^^^可以省略。 : fit is applied. ^^^^^^^^^^這樣講的感覺，似乎是「有方法，可是大家不用」 : By a novel keeping fit (KT) method, BowNiSo, the decreasing of fat in 1.decrease可以直接當名詞，不必用動名詞。 2.abdominal fat更好。 : abdomen during the treatment was observed by magnetic resonance image (MRI). : This method was based on seiral natural products which isolated from the deep ^^^這是事實，可以用現在式。 ^^要用被動，不然就去掉 seiral是指？a series of? which : sea anemone to control people not to eat fried chicken. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^可用keep people from eating... : People who tested in this method shown that they all lose weight 1.People who "were" tested，不然就用People tested 其實還有更好的字：Subjects，受試者。 2.shown是過去分詞，你要說的是showed嗎？ 2.they all "lost" significant weight during "the three-week" ... : in significant during 3 weeks experiment. The rate of losing fat was 5-fold : higher comparing to the control. 5-fold，是說five times嗎？還是fivefold? : This results suggest that KT is a good method for losing weight, may ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^數的問題 ^^^^^ 是These results suggest還是This result suggests？要and : be used as a alternative method in current medicine. While the mechanism of ^^^^^^建議用"However," : the chemicals used in KT needed to be explored in the future. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ 可用requies further exploration in the future. 請參考:) -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 122.126.69.204 ※ 編輯: chileno 來自: 122.126.69.204 (10/27 10:41)