Re: [寫作班] HIbaby, Liver

看板ST-English (英文科技寫作)作者senlin (seize)時間17年前 (2007/12/12 09:27)推噓1(1推 0噓 0→)

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順便藉此回應你之前所提的跳躍思考的問題仔細看這段文章可以分成三部分第一部分是成人的肝臟組成第二部分是胚胎的肝臟功能第三部分說研究肝臟的發育可以發展治療肝臟疾病的方法這三部分的東西其實都是獨立的彼此之間的關聯僅在"發育"上且第一部分跟第二部分還是必須讀者了解fetal會變成adult才有辦法建立起的關聯所以其實這之間的跳躍思考不可謂不大會建議改成以下方式撰述先指出什麼樣的肝臟疾病是發育不全造成的然後指出胚胎時的肝臟組成成年時的肝臟組成最後再回到該疾病指出說因為哪些細胞不見了造成肝臟功能失調所以需要了解其內在分子機制這樣就會比較完整或是先指出肝臟在胚胎與成人之間的組成差異那些疾病關係到肝臟發育最後說明研究發育的分子機制何以可以解決該疾病也比較會讓人能了解你的論述重點建議寫完的時候自己再看一下你想說的重點是什麼有沒有每一句都繞著那個重點在轉如果沒有那真的需要思考一下是否上下句之間有漏洞存在 ※ 引述《HIbaby (燃燒吧! 嗨~北鼻!)》之銘言： : The adult liver is the largest organ and plays a major : role in metabolism and has several functions in the body, : including detoxification, plasma protein synthesis and so on. : The liver consists several types cells that including hepatocytes, : Kupffer cells, hepatic stellate cells, sinusoidal endothelial cells, : and blood cells. On the other hand, fetal liver is a hematopoietic : tissue and acquires metabolic ability with decreasing proliferation, : becomes a metabolic organ after birth. This dramatic change : triggered by several signal transduction and carrier on specific : transcriptional factors. However, the mechanisms of the regulation : does not understanding very well. Thus, to understand the regulatory : of gene transcription during liver development may provide a good : way to discover a new treatment for liver diseases. : --------- : 敬請指教. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 128.223.138.98