Re: [寫作班] 托福第20週, rjune, 2

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※ 引述《rjune (事情永遠做不完)》之銘言： : 2. People have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of : modern life. Some read; some exercise; others work in their gardens. : What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress? Use specific : details and examples in your answer. : ------------------------------------------------------------------------- : People are always busy in their job and families. Nowadays, in a fashion ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^ doing their jobs and tending to their families fashionable : and modern society, while people are becoming more and more nervous and ^^^ : tired, distress and anxiety occurred much more and more frequently. In my ^^^^^^^^occur(because "are" is present tense) : opinion, planning efficiently for your vacation is very important for : today’s people to reduce stress. I don’t mean that people have to do : how great things, but just think what you are interested in and what you xxx ^^^^^"think about" or "consider" : prefer to do at all. If you like to travel, just plan a trip to somewhere : you like, if you like to sing, just plan a karaoke party for fun. Whatever . If (or) ; if : you do, don’t disorganize your free time anyway. ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^* *People generally don't "intentionally" disorganize their free time. However, they may do a bad job organizing it. Suggestion: "Whatever you do, try to organize your free time well." : Some people may say, “I do need a good rest at my weekend after a whole on : workday week.” I heartily agree with that. I just think people may need more ^^^^^^^^^^^^ "... after a whole week working." : sleep at the weekend, but don’t need to sleep all day long because that will : make you more tired and feel empty after that. Most people in this world are : busy and tired, but they still need to be cheered up and have something for ^^^^* : fun. It will bring you enough energy for the next workday week if you spent ^^^* *Try to keep focus on who your audience is. Remember whether you started out addressing the audience (as "you"), or talking about people (as "they") in general, and stick with it, so you don't alternate between the two. : your weekend or vacation time happily. However, I just feel like planning : efficiently for vacation time is very important for all the people, and that : is the best way to reduce stress in my opinion. : ----------------------------------------------------------------------------- : 這是我第一次參加寫作班, 文筆不好, 希望寫作可以進步^^, 請多指教! You seem to have a clear writing method. Pay more attention to consistency in verb tenses, use of pronouns, and keep track, and your essays will become more fluent very soon! -- 一個學術英文寫作領域的討論板在 PTT （telnet:ptt.cc〉【分組討論區】 --> 11 國家研究院政治, 文學, 學術 --> 科學學術研究院 --> 學術總合研究中心 --> ★ST-English PTT 學術英文/論文寫作班 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 70.79.36.70