Re: [寫作班]corson 托福第一週-3
※ 引述《corson (浪人劍客)》之銘言：
: I do not have any strong, positive or negative answer
: for this actually. However, my first impression was
: the disappearance of expectation to Chinese New Year
of the (Lunar)
Replacing chinese to lunar is just suggested
The article "the" is usually not omitted here.
: when I saw the question. I heard that people were very
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: expected the coming of Chinese New Year. Many good foods
people were very expected the coming of Chinese New Year.
I don't think the usage of "expected" here is appropriate.
If something is expected, people expect it.
I suggect you use this sentence.
"People looked forward to the coming of the Lunar New Year in the past."
: cannot be supplied in usual days due to the poverty of
: farm. Everyone will expect the New Year because they can
XXXXX expected could
: eat delicious foods like chicken or pork. Nowadays, I
: feel that the Chinese New Year atmosphere gradually
: decayed with the convenience getting of foods.
in XX
: Our life has become very different than before.
from it was
: The world mainly became an industrial and commercial
: community, so the food also became easier to prepare
XXX
: for convenience. Microwave oven can help us to eat
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
: the hot and delicious foods even in midnight.
XXX
: Instant noodles can be a best solution when you
is the
: had no time to get a meal outside the room. However,
have XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
: I have to ask: do we need the kind of life? Although
this
: I do not have the standpoint to opposite getting the
: food easily because I still loved the McDonald’s
love
: or walked to 7-11 to buy a battle of red tea, I want
walk
: to ask: who give us this desire? It is like a globalized
: conspiracy.
: I was looked like a double-faced person.
XXX XX X
S+ look/sound/feel like+ n
S+ look/sound/feel + adj
These are the common usage.
: I criticized the fast foods but got their advantages
X
: at same time. When we eliminated the poverty,
: we also eliminated some tradition unknowingly.
traditionsXXXXXXXXXXX
: I do not know whether it is good, and I think
: that is the problem.
: 又要有勞大家了 我知道還是寫的很爛 但自己又很難知道怎麼改
: 只覺得有些地方就是怪怪的 希望這樣寫方向沒有錯才好
: 謝謝各位囉
Some suggestions
1.Use coherent tenses in the related sentences. If you are not sure which
tense should be used, just use the present tense. Use the past tense only
when it's really necessary.
2.If you are not sure if you use a certain word correctly, Look it up in
the dictionary or google it to find some examples.
3.Read more materials and recite the examplary sentences. Try to imitate
them when writing.
4.I just correct some obvious errors. I suggest you rewrite a new one.
Maybe somebody else can help you more.
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