Re: [寫作班] 托福第17週 yihuan,1

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唸書念累了，照您寫的結構回一下僅供參考 :) 我直接寫我會寫的方法，省點時間請您自行比較有差異的地方 :) In my country Taiwan, we have a special way to deal with garbage. We have to keep our garbage home and wait for garbage trucks coming to collect it. Moreover, we pay lots of attention on recycling plastic products, batteries, and kitchen waste. It is a very amazing custom for foreigners. Thus I think introducing it to others is the most meaningful. My supporting ideas are as follows. To begin with, in the past the residents of Taiwan used to leave their garbage somewhere outside their houses to prevent from the disgusting smell staying inside the houses. However, this selfish action causes serious sanitary problems. For example, there are always cockroaches and other insects seen on the road. These problems make the appearance of our cities look very dirty, and increase the risks of causing infectious deseases. As a result, our government enforces a law for everyone to keep the garbage inside the house until the garbage trucks coming to collect it. This new policy really changes the terrible situations. It not only makes roads in Taiwan cleaner, but also improves the sanitary conditions. I believe that this custom is very special, and it is worthy of telling other people about the story behind this policy. In addition, most of the countries in the world focus on recycling only normal recyclable materials, such as paper, palstic products, and batteries. We all know that it is beneficial to recycle those products, and we get a greener world from it. However, in Taiwan, we pay additional attention on recycling kitchen waste. Sometimes, we cook more than we can eat, and it produces kitchen waste. In the past throwing out the kitchen waste with the rest of the garbage is our only option to deal with it. But now, we know kitchen waste can make useful fertilizers that help plants to grow up. Moreover, recycling kitchen waste reduces both the amount of useless garbage and the associated processing cost. Furthermore, we note that we can make more organic fertilizers by going through a few additional processes on the kitchen waste. It is very important to do something beneficial to our earth, and turning kitchen waste into useful fertilizers is one way of doing it. This is why I think I should tell other people about this special custom of ours. In conclusion, the way we Taiwanese dealing with garbage is beneficial not only to our communities and cities, but also to the living Earth. Nowadays the issue of global warming is very crucial. Therefore how to make our environments cleaner and greener is very important for each resident in this global village. I hope that people can learn our way of dealing with garbage through our sharing this useful custom. If everybody can follow it, I believe that we will have a better living environment. 後記：我覺得您的文章中有不少基本的文法，片語與字的用法，和句子結構上的錯誤。如果不先花點時間買本好的文法書扎扎實實地從頭寫過一回，作文真的很難進步。或許一本好的片語手冊也可以買來當作參考書用。而文章的結構，和練習把句子寫的簡潔有力，一字不多，一字不少，那又是另一層功夫了。基本功不好，我覺得練習了100個題目也是進步有限。我建議不如挑一個自己喜歡的題目，先寫一個版本，然後不斷地改進再改進。文法和用字就不用說了，一句話一個意思可以有很多不同的寫法。多練習找出當下最適合的句子結構，使用最精簡的字數。字字推敲常常是必要的，而文章的結構也可以不斷地改進修飾。這樣才能一法通，萬法通，舉一反三。一個題目覺得練習地差不多了，覺得厭煩了，沒什麼好改了，再改下去是吹毛求疵了，再換下一個題目，我想這樣練習比較扎實。其實我們常用的單字，片語，句子結構，文章結構，並不需要很多，所以扎扎實實地練幾個題目，把基本的東西搞清楚一點，會覺得英文進步很快的。增進寫作的能力是一條無止盡的路，與您共勉勵！ -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 128.125.162.26 ※ 編輯: pricing 來自: 71.133.87.80 (07/25 19:56)