Re: [寫作班] 托福第46週 qweqweqweqwe 5

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※ 引述《qweqweqweqwe (啪)》之銘言： : 很久沒寫了寫不好還要麻煩請各位版友幫忙 : 另外我自己也有列出幾個疑問@@ 各位先進們可以幫我解答一下嗎 : 當然詞彙好像有點貧乏XD : 5. Some people are always in a hurry to go places and get things done. Other : people prefer to take their time and live life at a slower pace. Which do you : prefer? : I prefer always in a hurry to go places and get things done than other. 原來主要子句的動詞是be verb (some people are...），所以應該要寫成I prefer to be always in a hurry... : My reasons are as follows. : First of all, living in the hurry tempo in my daily lives, I gain more gain是「努力後獲得」，所以通常不會跟pressure搭配，建議用get就好。pressure不可數，不必用複數。這個可以查字典確定。 : pressures(這邊要複數嗎) to let me finish the work more efficiently and : effectively. If people do not suffer from enough pressure to lead to do suffer是負面的意思，可是你想使用的是正面的意思，其實一樣用get就好。 : things more quickly, it may waste a large amount of time. For example, when I : was a student in college, I tend to finish my jobs as quick(adj or adv?) as I 用quickly。你要修飾的是finish，所以用副詞。 : can. I used to check my jobs again and again until that I thought the best until I thought I have done my best. : jobs I’ve did. After that, I can do a lot of things what I want and totally : enjoy my leisure time without any things that may bother me. : Second, it help me gain achievement and kudos. One of the major reasons is kudo是什麼？似乎不是很正統的英文。 : that I always suffer from pressure, so that I can train myself to taste : pressure through trials and errors no matter it is heavy(強大的壓力怎樣形容? strong, intense : Strong?). I, for one, usually try to limit time to achieve one goal under : pressure which may decrease my failures in the future work. Because if people decrease而已嗎？eliminate會不會更好？ : always live life at a slower pace, they will suffer from a lot of vital(這邊可 : 以用vital嗎?沒工作活不下去XD) problems, such as doing jobs ineffective. 這句推論有點怪。因果關係順一下好了 If someone always live at a slow pace, he may do his tasks ineffectively, which in turn would lead to loss of his job. : Eventually, it will let their abilities to drop down at the moment just abilities沒有辦法drop down 你可以說lead to poor performance : because of they must finish their own work in the limitation of time; 這裡不必用分號，句點分成兩句就好。 : however, if they do not, they will be fired and lose a great number of : advantages in hunting jobs. : Last but not least, to expose themselves under pressure, people can learn : more useful things and gain more experiences from their daily lives. People : can acquire more knowledge when they are in schools and know how to control : their timetable in efficient ways. Not only can it help people do their jobs : systematically, but it also helps them do their jobs more aggressively. So : that living in the high paces, people can gain more beneficial in their daily Benefits. beneficial是形容詞 : lives. : For the reasons above, I prefer to go places and get things done than other. 結論句這樣不對。你可以考慮這樣寫： I prefer to get thing done quickly. : (28: 00 mins)(351 words) 請參考。 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 118.165.12.211