[英中] 誰能幫我檢查我的自傳 謝謝!!

看板Translation (筆譯/翻譯)作者 (Brock)時間12年前 (2013/08/01 00:04), 編輯推噓3(308)
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寫了很久,希望有好心人是幫我檢查一下,謝謝!!! My name is Tom who is now 22 years old. I graduated from Takming University of Science and Technology, majoring in Department of Foreign Language. I live in Neihu Chiu in Taipei City now. I like living in the big city because of the convenient transportation here. In addition, it’s more possible for me to meet all kinds of people from different places. To talk about my attitude towards working, I can adjust myself to a new job easily. That is to say, I can learn new skills quickly in a new company and communicate with the coworkers fluently without any problem. Moreover, I like to meet challenges and I am always ready to face them. I always give top priority to the quality of my tasks. Pressure would not be a problem for me. It will not affect my enthusiasm of work because I am capable to conquer all difficulties and turn them into power so that everything would be fine or even better. As a result, I have strong confidence that I can work very well even under pressure. To talk about other skills I have, I obtained a TOEIC certificate with 600 scores. Also, when it comes to computer, I have various skills that I can deal with the computer related problem easily. I've made a lot of efforts in paperwork learning. I am proficient in data processing and summarizing, computer typesetting with Word and presentation making with PowerPoint. In order to increase my experience and to update myself, I am longing to put what I've learned into practice instead of sitting at home. Besides, my short-term goal is to get certificates that relates with what I am going to do as possible as I can. Furthermore, I am going to assimilate more knowledge and absorb myself in professional skills in order to keep myself up. By doing so, I believe I can make efforts and success and contribute to the company. Please contact me if you have any problem. Thank you for your time. -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 119.14.48.157

08/01 01:09, , 1F
由於你是外文系,我想段落的主題句、unity,
08/01 01:09, 1F

08/01 01:10, , 2F
supporting material, coherence 應該都是英文作文該
08/01 01:10, 2F

08/01 01:10, , 3F
注意的事。自傳也不例外,目前看來這些方面都要修正。
08/01 01:10, 3F

08/01 01:11, , 4F
而文字小錯也該注意。第一句 Tom who 是限定用法,馬上
08/01 01:11, 4F

08/01 01:12, , 5F
就錯了。何況這裡應該不必用關係子句吧。
08/01 01:12, 5F

08/01 01:14, , 6F
倒數第二句的平行也不對。中間的勞煩你再仔細檢查了。
08/01 01:14, 6F

08/02 03:08, , 7F
第一句who那邊就算加了comma,用在自傳上還是怪怪的@@"
08/02 03:08, 7F

08/02 04:10, , 8F
倒數第二句 problem->question
08/02 04:10, 8F

08/02 04:12, , 9F
*certificates that are related to
08/02 04:12, 9F

08/04 22:31, , 10F
學習不同文類之寫作建議直接參考該文類,不要自己埋頭苦寫
08/04 22:31, 10F

08/04 22:32, , 11F
以本例而言,請多閱讀一些以英文為原文的自傳寫法
08/04 22:32, 11F
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文章代碼(AID): #1H-JLyIw (Translation)