[英中] 紐約時報翻譯風格的問題

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我困擾的地方在於英文翻成中文，有些句子很容易變得太長，閱讀起來似乎會痛苦？然後有些地方看起來有點生硬或不達意。我把感覺可能有問題的英文段落上色請問有沒有什麼改善的好建議？ ============================================================================== 衛理宗主教欲結束對主持同志婚禮牧師的裁定 Methodist Bishop to End Trials for Ministers Who Perform Gay Weddings 紐約時報 (2014年3月10日) http://ppt.cc/Mt~D The head bishop of the United Methodist Church in New York on Monday committed to ending church trials in his region for ministers who perform same sex-marr iages, essentially freeing them to conduct a ceremony still prohibited under his denomination’s laws. As the first sitting United Methodist bishop to publicly make such a pledge, Bishop Martin D. McLee instantly became a leading figure in a decades-old movement within the United Methodist Church, the country’s second-largest Protestant denomination, to extend equal recognition and rights to gay and lesbian members. Though Bishop McLee said that he hoped his approach would heal the church’s deep divisions over homosexuality, more conservative Methodists warned that his actions would push the denomination closer to an irrevocable split. 聯合衛理公會紐約教區主教，星期一宣佈要結束在他教區內，對主持同志婚禮牧師的教會裁定。基本給予他們在教派法規禁止下仍能主持同志婚禮的自由。身為第一位公開如此聲明的衛理宗主教，Martin D. McLee立刻成為美國第二大抗議教派衛理宗內，持續數十年之久的同志平等權利與認可運動的風雲人物。雖然McLee主教說他希望他的作法能癒合教會在同性戀議題的分歧，較為保守的衛理信徒則警告他的行動會將教派推向不可逆轉的分裂。 Bishop McLee’s pledge came as part of a resolution announced Monday with the Rev. Dr. Thomas W. Ogletree, a Methodist minister and retired dean of Yale Divinity School who had faced a church trial after he officiated the wedding of his gay son in 2012. The trial had been scheduled to begin on Monday. Instead, Bishop McLee, who oversees about 460 churches in lower New York State and Connecticut, agreed to drop all charges against Dr. Ogletree; in exchange, he asked only that Dr. Ogletree participate in a dialogue about the church and its stance on matters of sexuality. Promoting dialogue, the bishop said, could be a model for other United Methodist bishops to follow. "While many insist on the trial procedure for many reasons, I offer that trials are not the way forward,” Bishop McLee said in a statement attached to the resolution of Dr. Ogletree’s case. “Church trials result in harmful polarizat ion and continue the harm brought upon our gay and lesbian brothers and sisters.” McLee主教的保證，部份作為在星期一對Thomas W. Ogletree（一名衛理宗牧師以及耶魯大學神學院退休院長）於2012年為他的同志兒子主持婚禮，而面臨教會裁決的解套協議。該裁決原預定於星期一召開。然而監管下紐約州與與康乃狄克州超過四百六十座教堂的McLee 主教，同意撤銷對於Dr. Ogletree的所有控訴。作為交換，他只要求Dr. Ogletree參加一場關於教會與其在情慾議題立場的對談會。主教說經由發起對談可作為其他聯合衛理公會主教跟隨的示範對象。McLee主教在附帶對Dr. Ogletree案子解套協議的聲明中說「雖然很多人為了很多原因而堅持繼續裁決程序，我主張裁定不是向前看的方向。教會的裁定導致有害的分化並且繼續為同志弟兄姊妹們帶來傷害」 The two ministers whose complaint had prompted the church legal process against Dr. Ogletree, however, disagreed and sharply criticized the settlement. “The impact of this settlement today will be that faithful United Methodists who support the church’s teachings will be ignored,” the Rev. Randall C. Paige and the Rev. Roy E. Jacobsen said in a statement. “Far from avoiding schism, today’s settlement increases the probability that schism will take place.” In October 2012, Dr. Ogletree, 80, presided over the wedding of his son, Thomas Rimbey Ogletree, to Nicholas Haddad. After their wedding announcement appeared in The New York Times, Mr. Paige, pastor of Christ Church in Port Jefferson Station, and Mr. Jacobsen, a retired New York pastor, filed a formal complaint against Dr. Ogletree for breaking church rules, sparking a legal proceeding against him. 然而投訴Dr. Ogletree並將之交付教會訴訟程序的兩位牧師，不同意該協議並對此提出了尖銳的批評。Randall C. Paige和Roy E. Jacobsen在聲明中說道：「今天這項協議的影響將會意謂著支持教會教導的忠實衛理宗信徒受到忽視。今天的協議遠遠不會避免分裂，反而增加分裂發生的可能」。2012年10月， 80歲的Dr. Ogletree為其兒子Thomas Rimbey Ogletree主持與Nicholas Haddad的婚禮。在他們的婚禮公開於紐約時報之後，位於傑佛遜港站的基督教堂牧師 Paige先生與退休的紐約市牧師Jacobsen先生提交對於 Dr. Ogletree 的正式投訴，控告他破壞教會規則，點燃一場訴訟程序之火。 Clergy in the United Methodist Church pledge to follow the church’s laws as contained in its rule book, the Book of Discipline. Among those laws is a prohibition on clergy officiating same-sex unions, in keeping with the book’s declaration that the practice of homosexuality is “incompatible with Christian teaching." A liberal wing of the church has been pushing to change those rules since they began to be implemented in 1972, bringing up the issue for votes at each of the international denomination’s quadrennial conferences. In 2012, one retired bishop, Melvin Talbert, sparked a civil disobedience campaign by calling on members to act against what he felt were immoral and discriminatory rules. Since then, about 1,500 United Methodist ministers around the country have pledged to officiate same-sex unions in defiance of the rules, including 217 clergy in the New York Annual Conference. Bishop McLee’s move, said Dorothee Benz, who leads a pro-gay rights group, Methodists in New Directions, shows that “the bishops are starting to catch the same drift.” 衛理聯合教會的神職人員宣誓遵從記載於其法規手冊紀律書的教會規定。當中的法規禁止神職人員主持同性婚禮，以與該書中實踐同性情慾與基督教導不容的主張保持一致。從 1972年這些規則開始陸續被增添之後，教會中的自由派一直在推動對這些規則的改變，在每四年一次的國際教派會議中提議投票表決。在2012年，Melvin Talbert召集成員以公民不服從運動對抗他覺得不道德和歧視性的規則。從那時起，從各地有大約1500位衛理宗神職人員主持同性婚禮來挑戰那些規則，其中就包含紐約年度會議的217位牧師。領導衛理宗內同志權利團體新方向的Dorothee Benz說McLee的行動顯示「主教們正開始往同個水流的潮向前進。」 Bishop McLee was able to drop the charges against Dr. Ogletree because once his case was referred to the church prosecutor, there was no need to get the agreement of the original complainants to resolve the matter. The resolution sparked a strong negative reaction among more conservative Methodists. “We are really disappointed in the decision that was made to drop the trial completely because there was no penalty or consequence for an act of disobedience,” said the Rev. Thomas A. Lambrecht, the vice president of Good News, a traditionalist Methodist group. “And it’s very troubling that the bishop has made a commitment to cease trials, because it indicates that there will be no accountability in the future in New York to the Book of Discipline.” McLee主教能撤銷對於Dr. Ogletree的控訴，因為一旦他的案子轉介給教會起訴官就沒必要讓原先的投訴者以協商方式解決爭議。該協議在較為保守的衛理信徒間引發強烈的負面回應。傳統派衛理團體好消息的副總裁Thomas A. Lambrecht說：「我們對於裁定完全被徹下的決定感到很失望，違紀行為沒有了處罰或後果。主教致力於結束裁決的宣佈也令人煩心，這表明未來在紐約紀律書將沒有效力。」 For Dr. Ogletree, Monday was a day of triumph. His wife, son, and son-in-law joined him at the news conference, as did about 50 Methodist gay-rights supporters from around the country. “We need to have a framework where people begin to talk to one another,” he said. “I think it’s going to be one that we will see other bishops follow, and I am very happy about that.” 至於Dr. Ogletree，星期一對他而言是勝利的一天。他的太太、兒子、子婿和他一起加入這場記者會，連同來自各地50位支持同志權利的衛理宗信徒在場。他說：「我們要有個讓來自各地的人們能彼此對話的平台。我認為這將是我們看到其他主教跟進的開始，而我樂於見到此事發生。」 -- 潘章少有美容儀，時人競慕之。楚國王仲先，聞其美名，故來求為友，章許之。因願同學，一見相愛，情若夫婦，便同衾共枕，交好無已。後同死，而家人哀之，因合葬於羅浮山。冢上忽生一樹，柯條枝葉，無不相抱。時人異之，號為共枕樹。 -----《太平廣記》 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 220.132.174.179 ※ 編輯: bluebrown 來自: 220.132.174.179 (03/14 02:10)