[寫作班] 第一周 Toilet paper, HIbaby
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我採取 前言 方法 結果 討論的方式撰寫
不過好像連的不太順
使用句子頗為單調
且很多地方覺得怪怪的
一開始我想要表達有許多材料被用於廁所中的清潔
期中的牛皮紙價格低廉 但是 觸感以及吸收能力不好
所以這次提供了新的發明 也就是衛生紙
衛生紙的使用較以前優 可以提供未來一個新的選擇..
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Several materials - such as leaf, cloth or kraft paper-
provide for cleaning in bathroom.
Kraft paper have a benefit character, cheap,
however, the skin touch and the water absorb ability is not so good.
The length of fibers in paper materials determined comfortable skin touch.
Here, we development a novel structure style of paper, named toilet paper,
which were constructed by short type fibers.
We provide the toilet paper in schools and department stores
to estimate using feeling from user and analysis the water absorption.
From the questionary results,
99% people feel very good compared to past experience.
Toilet paper can absorb water 10 times faster then kraft paper.
Toilet paper may provide a new choice for people in bathroom.
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感謝大家.
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