Re: [寫作班] 第一周 Toilet paper, HIbaby
toilet paper
Several materials - such as leaves, cloth or kraft paper- provide
perseonal cleaning in bathroom. Kraft paper have a benefit character,
that is cheap. However, the sense of touch and the ability of water
absorption is not so good. The length of fibers in paper materials
determines comfortable sense of touch. Here, we developed a new kind
of paper in novel structure, named as toilet paper, which are constructed
by short fibers. We provide the toilet paper in schools and department
stores to explore user’s feeling after use and analyze the water absorption.
From the results of the questionnaires, 99% people feel good comparing to
past experience. Toilet paper, which absorb water 10 times faster than
kraft paper, provide a new choice for people in bathroom.
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謝謝板上先進的改正, 整理之後. 比原本的文章好很多.
看到了自己的缺點
a. 名詞當動詞用. 用名詞用習慣了, 混著用實在很糟糕
b. 累贅字太多, 可以合併同主詞句
c. 打完文章好, 自己先檢查仔細.
d. 動詞使用 多翻字典 注意使用法.
為了改善毛病. 整理寫作班同學的文章, 邊看修改處, 可以學習別人用法.
再一次道謝. 希望現在搶救英文還來得及 ^_^
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